TPO 46
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this day and age, not only do the celebrities enjoy the feelings to live in the spotlight, but their opinions set considerable store by the public. In most cases, young people are inclined to be swayed by these celebrities much more significantly than the old.
The celebrities mainly adopt the internet to voice their attitude towards societal events, and young people get more access to the internet. The worldwide web provides the celebrities to express their own ideas, without the aid of traditional media. It is not uncommon that celebrities' opinions get more approval on the internet than one from the authorized agency. When such divergent opinions on the same events occur, young people are apt to stand by the celebrities' side, completely contrary to the old people's choice. Since young people receive less from the authorized sources and vice versa.
Furthermore, young people are always trying to break the rules, and celebrities opinions make them realize that they are not alone. By voicing anti-conventional views, celebrities are regarded as the pioneer of disobeying the fossilized rules and creating brand-new societal fibers. old people are inclined to reject to this avant garde behaviors, to regard young people who hold different views as those who go astray. I am not to say the celebrities attitudes represent the future, but they, admittedly, cast doubt on the past. such characters are easy to be accepted by young people who are trying to break the constraints rather than old people who have been accustomed to the past.
It goes without saying that celebrities are the pioneer in the social fibers, but they also sometimes misinform people who lack societal experiences, especially for the young people. The celebrities, in pursuit of more fame and glory, may present ideas that are intentionally attracting viewers' eyes. old people who have been familiar with such tricks then will look down upon these pretentious celebrities. However, young people, who are seeking to be distinguished from others, are apt to propagandize such opinions to show off their differences.
As the aforementioned arguments suggest, the young people are the ones who listen for and follow the celebrities at the contemporary society. this phenomenon can not be labeled as "right" or "wrong" simplistically. Instead, we need to guide the young people's values and mind in the positive direction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Old
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Suggestion: Such
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Suggestion: Old
... intentionally attracting viewers eyes. old people who have been familiar with such...
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...elebrities at the contemporary society. this phenomenon can not be labeled as '...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28165374677 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01146578036 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537467700258 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.7489611987 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.578947368 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1444616464 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051847812053 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320049208301 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883134849672 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033505756402 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.