TPO 46
Question:
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Celebrities, a special part of the society, have aroused discussions and even debates over their influence on the public. Celebrities, in many people's view, have a significant impact on the old's life. Contrary to the opinion they hold, my perspective is that celebrities play a more important role in young people than they do in the old people.
When it comes to this kind of issue about the influence of celebrities, we need to consider what aspects of our life affected by them. The answer might depend on a lot of factors such as how an individual's earlier experience was. For me, to be honest, personalities and self-development are the most obvious facets influenced by their opinions.
What should be discussed first is that athletes shape my personalities, including competition and persistence. First of all, it is from those athletes that I learn the importance of competition. This should not be surprising since often if they do not compete and perform excellently, it is likely for them to warm the bench. Similarly, if I cannot outperform most students, professors hardly pay attention to me, let alone communicate frequently with me. Additionally, what I have to say is the persistence those athletes teach me. After tripping and falling, we have to stand up and continue to run toward our destinations. Without athletes' opinions and behaviors, there might be no point for me in developing these two good priorities. In contrast, my grandpa can live happily without the requirement for competing and insisting on something.
What should be also worth our discussing is that celebrities' opinions benefit my self-development from both aspects of career and relationship. For one thing, the two good attributes mentioned above really place me as a beneficiary. To be more specific, competence enables me to get a promotion, and persistence comes in very handy, especially when I struggle with thorny issues. For another thing, I admit that entertainers offer me some same topics with friends and colleagues. Of course, entertainers function as a good stress reducer, making me capable tackling stress and maintaining a healthy relationship with myself as well. All these advantages I get from celebrities boost my self-development not only at work but also in daily life. Unlike the youth, most of the elder usually do not need to develop their careers, and they talk about health but not entertainers on a daily basis.
To sum it up, there are many aspects influenced by celebrities opinions, but for me personalities and self-development are the top two priorities over all other aspects. Therefore, the opinions of celebrities, in these two facets, seem to influence youngsters more than the old.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'olds'' or 'old's'?
Suggestion: olds'; old's
... view, have a significant impact on the olds life. Contrary to the opinion they hold...
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Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
... depend on a lot of factors such as how an individuals earlier experience was. For me, to be h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, similarly, so, therefore, well, another thing, in contrast, kind of, of course, such as, first of all, for another thing, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18099547511 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19179695816 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542986425339 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.2831227283 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.5652173913 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17391304348 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138417186341 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428432773366 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056587252364 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922210191182 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062120994459 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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