TPO 47 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
The issue regarding the global events, in this day and year, has never failed to arouse the public concern and at the same time provoke a heated debate among individuals. Some are inclined to be strong believers in the extreme claim that events happening around the world are not important to consider. Perhaps sound and attractive as their argument seems, but it can hardly bear any closer analysis. Accordingly, I, without any hesitation, advocate that knowing the global events plays a vital important role in our daily life on account of the following evident reasons and evidences.
On the one hand, knowing global events can do some help to our investment plan. To be more specific, there may be many huge events influencing one part of economy and then influencing the whole economy just like butterfly effect. People who keep an eye on the global events know things around the world earlier than others. Therefore, knowing global events can react more quickly to the changes than others, which will save us from economic disasters. The point can be better and further supported by the example from my friend John. The trade war between China and the U.S. took place four years ago. John was investing the stock market at that time. As soon as he had heard of the trade war, he sold all his stock relevant to the trade war and successfully avoided an enormous loss.
On the other, it is a wonderful means to broaden our horizon. Precisely, plenty of global events have to do with their local culture, ranging from food taste to religion. In consequence, knowing global events can make us more exposed to the foreign culture and our minds become more adaptable, diverse and flexible. I can think of no better illustration for this point than the example from myself. I used to have no ideas of exotic food. However, one time I accidentally ran into Mexican food. The Mexican cuisine caught my sense of taste using beef taco and fajitas. I started to learn there were plenty of tasty food out of my hometown cuisine and became more open-minded to accept transcultural communication.
Considering all the reasons and examples discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that knowing about events happening around the world is significant and highly valuable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...town cuisine and became more open-minded to accept transcultural communication. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89664082687 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52686491618 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589147286822 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6176959657 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2380952381 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152977928654 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422780061627 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573834842665 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106550936001 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437944393832 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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