TPO54 Integrated Writing
Both the reading and the passage discuss about how to support the life of fishes and birds in The Salton Sea, but the speaker casts doubt on the standpoint in the reading that there're three practical ways to solve salinity problem.
The reading first claims that heating water and evaporating it will remove salt from water and when water cool down will be salt-free water. The speaker refutes that this way will cause many problems like health risk. For instance, when water evaporates, there maybe some toxic chemical into the air and people's health will be hurt if they breath it in.
Furthermore, the reading conceives that they can dilute salt by constructing pipelines and canals to bring the sea water into the lake. Contrary to the belief in the reading, the speaker asserts that the sea is 100km away from the lake, so the construction may cost a big amount of resources and the government may not have enough money to pay.
Finally, while the reading claims that constructing walls to divide the lake and keep large and main sections' salinity reducing with allowing small sections' salinity to grow might do great help, the speaker disagrees since there are many geological activities in this area and the walls can only last a small period of time and will be collapsed due to frequent earthquakes. Therefore, the reading has been contradicted again.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there are
...t on the standpoint in the reading that therere three practical ways to solve salinity ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: BREATHE_BREATH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'breathe'? 'breath' is a noun.
Suggestion: breathe
...and peoples health will be hurt if they breath it in. Furthermore, the reading conc...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...rea and the walls can only last a small period of time and will be collapsed due to frequent e...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1138.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 232.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90517241379 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41673158577 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612068965517 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.6004053339 49.2860985944 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.25 110.228320801 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 21.698381199 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 7.06452816374 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351427745827 0.272083759551 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136784413074 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111064068167 0.0662205650399 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178867225073 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969210174178 0.0443174109184 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 53.8541721854 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 63.6247240618 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there are
...t on the standpoint in the reading that therere three practical ways to solve salinity ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: BREATHE_BREATH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'breathe'? 'breath' is a noun.
Suggestion: breathe
...and peoples health will be hurt if they breath it in. Furthermore, the reading conc...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...rea and the walls can only last a small period of time and will be collapsed due to frequent e...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1138.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 232.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90517241379 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41673158577 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612068965517 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.6004053339 49.2860985944 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.25 110.228320801 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 21.698381199 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 7.06452816374 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351427745827 0.272083759551 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136784413074 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111064068167 0.0662205650399 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178867225073 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969210174178 0.0443174109184 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 53.8541721854 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 63.6247240618 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.