TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

News are an essential part of our daily life. Moreover, with advances in technology, it has been easier to follow news from different devices such as TV or radio or internet. Though some people may disagree, there is solid evidence that following news obsessively could disturb people's daily lives and harm them in many ways; whether psychological effects or their functionality in doing their errands. This essay will illustrate negative effects of following news abundantly on humans.

First, most of the news are about disasters and calamities. Like wars all over the world, or diseases. News not only distract minds from concentrating on daily chores but also affect peoples routine lives and the consequences could be very dangerous. For instance, about a year ago, I was way into news and following them, whether it was political news or social events or other types of them. There was a great fire spreading in a famous building named Fiasco. This building situated in the heart of Hartan; the capital of Somewhere; where I'm currently living. Lots of people were following this event, and it was horrible. Because of the lack of proper management and other factors, this particular event turned disastrous. About 21 firefighters died because the managing team couldn't assess the damages that fire caused to the building structure and in tore down after a few hours; with all of the people inside it. This calamity affected most of the people since it took a week finding bodies in the rumbles; all of whom were dead. I was feeling very depressed and gloomy. I couldn't concentrate on any of my works, and it took me a month to get past that horrible event.

Second, the negative effect of everyday news could be accumulated over time and spot hollow spaces in souls. For example, since the last four elections of the presidency in Somewhere; I have been following the news ever since. Everyday there are news about the liability of authorities in managing resources and finances. There hasn't been really good news in years. These news are hard for people who care about their country and its prosperity and could affect their lives adversely. Consider the construction of dams in this drought region for example. It had numerous negative effects on the environment and people. Many lake and rivers went dry, and underground water resources became arid as well. After a while, I noticed that my personal life affected dramatically and I was even thinking about suicide. I have decided to let go of the news and concentrate on my work and life. It has been really good since and I am improving skills since then.

Following news could affect minds negatively and devastate our lives. It is essential to have some general knowledge about current events; but more than that amount could lead us to depression and dysfunctionality.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 6, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
News are an essential part of our daily life. Mo...
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Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...Hartan; the capital of Somewhere; where Im currently living. Lots of people were f...
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Line 3, column 780, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...fighters died because the managing team couldnt assess the damages that fire caused to ...
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Line 3, column 891, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...nd in tore down after a few hours; with all of the people inside it. This calamity affecte...
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Line 3, column 1080, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...as feeling very depressed and gloomy. I couldnt concentrate on any of my works, and it ...
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Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...ave been following the news ever since. Everyday there are news about the liability of a...
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Line 5, column 329, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
... managing resources and finances. There hasnt been really good news in years. These n...
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Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'These newses'?
Suggestion: This news; These newses
...e hasnt been really good news in years. These news are hard for people who care about thei...
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Line 5, column 620, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun lake seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many lakes'.
Suggestion: Many lakes
... effects on the environment and people. Many lake and rivers went dry, and underground wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96226415094 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65479008139 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540880503145 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5949358348 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6206896552 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4482758621 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.79310344828 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 3.85842293907 492% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126644265907 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348188949485 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303148340406 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0819616092241 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191011667565 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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