Emerge of the media has enabled a major paradigm shift to peoples communication and knowledge about all around the world. There have been mixed reactions to vast amounts of news, all around the world and among different countries and peoples. I am in favor of the idea that it is significant to track the worlds events, even if apparently they will not affect on my daily life. Following lines further describe my view toward being curious about worlds news.
First and foremost, there is a great economic potential in events that happened in the world. The governments and nations are fully related to each others and so many trades are in current. This makes every little news valuable. For instance, the rate of oil is highly affected by events that happen in the world. A little tention between two countries can cause a big growth in oil price. My experience is a compelling example. I was always ciurous about financial and curency during my university, it was in Christmass Eve of 2011 that a news in the Qoura website attracted me. It had a logo like a coin and a big symbol of dollar inside it. It was a cryptocurency named Bitcoin. i bought one for 5 dollar, but now its value is 12,000 dollars. As it can be seen, that news which was not related to my country Iran and we even didnt have a convenient access to that gave me a great opportunity.
A second factor that should be taken into account is that, having information about what is happening in the world can save us lots of time. If we know about things that is passing around us we do not need to study a lot about a special event like travel. I had a very bad experience in this case. Last year I packed my luggage and was ready to visit Turkey. I had an important exam before that and I limited my exposure to media and news. When I went to buy a ticket for my trip, the travel agency warned me about bad political issues in the Turkey and said that it is better to reconsider my travel. I was completely ready to go and spent a week to plan and pack my things. If I have learnt about that circumstance in news, I would not have missed one week of my time.
All in all, I think that it is important to track events that are happening in the world and be up-to-date in new. Mainly because it can help you make money out of some special circumstances, and also you will not waste your time on things that heppend and you are unaware of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...a has enabled a major paradigm shift to peoples communication and knowledge about all a...
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Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...vents, even if apparently they will not affect on my daily life. Following lines further ...
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Line 2, column 538, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
..., it was in Christmass Eve of 2011 that a news in the Qoura website attracted me. It h...
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Line 2, column 682, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: I
.... It was a cryptocurency named Bitcoin. i bought one for 5 dollar, but now its va...
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Line 2, column 682, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
.... It was a cryptocurency named Bitcoin. i bought one for 5 dollar, but now its va...
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Line 2, column 701, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...rency named Bitcoin. i bought one for 5 dollar, but now its value is 12,000 dollars. A...
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Line 2, column 828, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... related to my country Iran and we even didnt have a convenient access to that gave m...
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Line 2, column 839, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'convenient access'.
Suggestion: convenient access
... my country Iran and we even didnt have a convenient access to that gave me a great opportunity. A...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in the world can save us lots of time. If we know about things that is passing ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, if, second, so, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3289183223 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44186832841 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529801324503 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0571683561 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.44 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.12 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.68 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201385063948 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514936730691 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605517975722 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134505063409 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524363900219 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.54 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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