Friendship is a very important part of our lives. It is often defins the people with whom we are able to share our problems and be confident. Some people think that the ability to make new friends easily is more important for happiness than the ability to maintain friendship with a small number of people over a long periond of time; others disagree. In my view, ability to make new friends easily is more important for happiness for two important reasons.
The main reason is that it will be easier to you to move to another city or country and start new life. People who are able to find a new friend easily are more likely to integrate into the new society. This assimilation will provide for you more opportunities in the new place. For example, my father was born in Vladivostok, it is near Siberia. This region was undeveloped and didn't provide good condition of life. As a result, many people wanted to left their houses. Many people stayed there because they didn't know how to make new friends outside their region. But my father could he has good communication skills. And he moved to Ukraine. Here he started up the business and family. As you can see, people who are able to find easily new friend are able to get more benefits.
Another reason is that you will meet more interesting person. Many people who travel communicate with other people, they share their experience with each other. Without this skill they won't be able to share the information. For instance, last year when I traveled to the Netherlands I met Vladslaw. He had been traveling around the world for two years. I'm very happy that I was able to become a friend with him, because he explained to me many different ways to save money during a trip. His advices were really helpful with them I'm able to save money and travel more. As you can, without this skill I wouldn't get these tips.
In sum, though some may think that the ability to maintain friendship with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important, but think that the ability to make new friends easily is more important for happiness. It not only will be easier for you to start a new life in a different place but also you will be able to find more interesting people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, for example, for instance, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52709359606 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38813649187 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453201970443 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.0564597053 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.52 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.24 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39939944123 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105192469319 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133098144953 0.0737576698707 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293763773675 0.150856017488 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14179464614 0.0645574589148 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.61 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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