TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

The word of friendship is inspired from the meanings of loyalty, warmth, safety and love. Really friendship is the best relationship to be between people. I think that lonely human without a friend is looks like body without soul. Indeed, making a real friends is extremely hard and it is not easy to have a loyal person. In order to that, I think that having a small number of friends for a long time is the real meaning of truly friendship.On our life stages, even if at the time of childhood, teenagers and after being graduate. we are supposed to meet new people and make a lot of relationships with them as they may be our classmates, roommates, team members, neighbors and workmates. All of those relationships are really important and make everybody feels happy and comfortable. But I think the real happiness doesn't occur until we get a real friend who stay with us until the rest of our life.

Real friend is different completely from other friends we met. He is the reflect of mine and the friend of soul. Imagine that you are in a trouble, who is the first one you fast to talk with for asking his help? assured he is your real friend. And when you have a great news like getting your dream job, for sure he is the first one you talk with. He is the one that you can not hide any thing from him. Me and my friend are like the opening book for each others.

For instance, At the time of my childhood when I entered the kindergarten I met my friend Manar; when I looked at her face and focus in her eyes really I felt very exciting. Me and Manar were good friends, we participated at the same hobbies and thinking. At the followed educational stages, we had the chance for being at the same class and Manar being my best friend. Today we celebrate the 20th anniversary of being true friends. She is not my friend but she is more than my sister. I remembered that she dressed me and made my make up in my wedding day. I named my daughter Manar also!! do you imagine that??!!.

In conclusion, Making a real friend that stay with you forever is the best achievement you can have in your life.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, really, so, for instance, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.368956743 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47189460428 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496183206107 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9685722726 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.652173913 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0869565217 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213689765758 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615148868352 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398443497247 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134680762854 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387658750755 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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