TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Finding a friend is the first step of any child to enter the community, the first friend is usually the longest friend ship. In my opinion, when we start a relationship with someone, we enter in to the group of friends of her, and it usually start from school until university and work environments, even occasionally with someone at the pool or in the park. They will be good friends for the rest of their lives. It’s not matter where they were met? the point is how long they’ve been together?

First, some scientist says that, due to of differences of people we have in the world so, we have different types of friendships too, friendships of utility, friendships of pleasure and friendships of virtue. Friendships of utility are friendships of mutual benefit: one way or another, the relationship is useful to both you and the other person. That person could be a colleague, customer or client or, for example, a neighbor with whom you exchange each other’s gardening or household tools, feed the cat and check each other’s houses when you go on holiday. Friendships of pleasure exist between you and those with whom you enjoy a shared interest: people in the same sports team as you, a book club, choir, dance class etc. It could be the people you met on holiday; you had a great time together and insisted you’d keep in touch. Friendships of virtue are based on mutual respect and admiration. These friendships may take more time to establish than the other two kinds, but they’re also stronger and more enduring. They often arise when two people recognize that they have similar values and goals; that they have similar visions for how their lives and the world should be. Often, they begin when a person is young at school, college or holiday jobs – though plenty form after that, too. For example, I was in primary school when I met my lovely friend her name was Jila, she was so cute and brave and I always admired her, and our friendship including all types of friendships, most of the time she protected me, she was full of energy and in or free time we danced. Our friendship lasted 9 years,in 2009, when I was 16 years old, my best friend died in a terrible incident.

Second, maybe you have a friendship where you’re becoming more and more unhappy. Despite the problems, you refuse to recognize that it’s time to let the friendship die and, instead, push on in the hope that things will get better between you. For example, can you stay friends with someone when you realize that you have major differences of opinion about a world situation, it dawns on you that their political values.

In conclusion, having one or more good friends is one of the requirements of life. The number of friends is not important, but the quality of their friendship is important.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 457, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2334.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74390243902 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62189134614 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516260162602 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5639196564 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.142857143 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80952380952 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207584297727 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682767598344 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372514155344 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133447559477 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327649520885 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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