Friends are one of the precious gifts and such excitement for people could find a buddy sharing the joy together. As the old word implies, “Life without friendship is like the sky without the sun”, maintaining long-term relations is a beautiful bond by all means, but while making new friends is essential to hold an open awareness.
To begin with, making new friends could offer a chance to freshen one’s perspective on the world. Even conserving old relations are excellent for each person; however, meeting a new buddy is valuable. Various perspectives would carry for the duration when communicating with strangers; it is an interesting experience for each. Perhaps some misunderstanding appears later, yet it still provides an opportunity for people to gain another observation of one’s thoughts. No one can predict what occurs follow-up. For example, 2 years ago, I didn’t realize that a stranger who I met on the tour in Seoul will switch my career in the other direction later. We had spent every night discussing our artworks since we met at the exhibition. After this sparkling encounter, it is so fresh for me to know the language translation between Installation Art and the Electronic Game.
In addition, developing a new relationship implies new adventures. Anytime people want to introduce strangers into their lives, a bunch of new experiences will boost up. Someone will come into people's lives and be their best friend later, or maybe someone will be their lover after they understand and be attracted to each other. It is such a lovely story, isn’t it? This tour is like turning on the Pandora box, and no one will know what the follow-up is, it is like a glimmering star in the gloomy night sky, so mysterious and beautiful. For some reason, few people prefer to linger in their comfort zone and do not have the nerve to talk to strangers. The lack of social trust is not merely poor for communities and for each individual as well.
Developing a new friendship with strangers carries several positive results such as expending one’s views and increasing self-confidence, and so on.
Consequently, I object to the argument that the ability to develop a new relationship is useless compared to maintaining a long-term friendship with a small group of people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 745, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...for communities and for each individual also. Developing a new friendship with str...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, so, still, while, for example, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07349081365 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99647655347 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59842519685 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0802623877 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.736842105 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0526315789 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197613005366 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595776277391 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051150000945 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130634033673 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409854564689 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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