Freindship is one of the indispensable part of our life. We need to communicate with others and make friends and be loved. While some believe maintaining few old friends are more important for having a happy life, others against it. In my opinion, although every old friend is like a precious gem that enrich our life , for having a happy life ,we need to make new friends due to changing situation in life, have more connection and better social comfort.
First of all, our life goes different stages and we have to adapt with any change in our life. For instance, when we grow up we go from high school to different university or college and then move to other place for job . Some have to change their city and even their country . Thus, even though in every stage of our life we may have special friends to hang out, making new friends is inevitable and necessary for us, unless we feel lonely and desperate. In fact, new friends in our workplace or college and so forth give us opportunity to get use to new environment and feel comfortable. In other words, without them we feel isolated, helpless and disappointed. Eventhough, we need time to trust our new friends and there would be misunderstanding in between, we learn how to be more flexible and easy going. Therefore, making new friends make our life more joyful.
Also, different friends have different point of views, thus, they broaden our perspective and make us open-minded. In other words, it is pleasant to learn how to see the things differently and from different scopes. This happens by making new friends with different ideas. Without friendship with variety of people, we grow very prejudiced. For instance, when I went to college and lived in dormitory, I made new friends there from different culture.It was interesting how we can change our view to improve ourselves and not be judgmental. After that, I felt differently about different cultures and understood that every culture has something that we can learn about. In addition, knowing about other culture and food made my life more enjoyable because I could go to different type of restaurant and have entertainment in other culture and feel more bond to the community. So, making new friends help us to be more experienced and be more mature and have more enternainment which brings more joy.
Lastly, we live in the world of communication. Improving our social skills is very important for our satisfaction and success. Research study from Harvard university showed that people with greater and broader social connection live longer and healthier. Also, people with greater network of friends are more successful in their life. For instance, my friend sara is very successful in her career due to her ability to good communication skills. She makes new friends in every situation and gets help from others in time of need and have access to a great network of people which is invaluable . So, Humans need to have social life which is collection of our friends and acquaintances and this makes our life happier.
In conclusion, although we need to maintain our old friends due to their reliability and being more familiar with us, making new friends have advantages for living happily. Not only they grow our perspective and broaden our view, but also make our social life more prosperous. When we are surrounded by lots of friends, we would have more pleasure and happiness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2839.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 580.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89482758621 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71376397617 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436206896552 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 874.8 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9217315206 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6333333333 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.43333333333 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186978805054 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693425749947 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549881678717 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136295503284 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202430573924 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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