TPO 49- Independent writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, friends are of great importance because if you live lonely, you would be very upset and the world become very sad to continue living in it. On of the most controversial question regarding this point is if maintaining friendship with a small group of people for a long time would bring happiness or making new friends easily is more essential to live a happy life. In my perspective, finding many new friends every time can give more joy for few reasons which I will elaborate more.
First, making new friends broaden your connection with a wider range of people. Nowadays, it is crucial to have a good career that earns you a lot of money. Some of the jobs are related to having connection with people and every time that you meet a new person, you can receive more money from adding him/her to your social zone and more money means more happiness in your life. For example, in the job of network marketing, the most basic need to flourish in that work is to have more member in your group, so you can sell more product to a larger number of people.
Furthermore, new friends can tell you more fun stories. Whenever a new person talks to you, the person would retell or talk about something about his perivous knowledge on a subject or an experience he had in past. The new stories that you hear can be very interesting because you may have never heard something like that before, and you can retell the same event to other people to look like a fun person that have a lot of experience. This adds up to your prestige and position in society.
Finally, being friend with someone for a long period of time can be exhusting. Imagine you see the same guy over and over for years in every weekend. Eventually, you get tired of the repeatition and you seek a new face to talk to. It doesn't matter if the person is your close friend or not, you hate every action he or she does because you both have witnessed or talked about every matter long time ago. According to a survey conducted in our school, most of the fights in the school happen amoung those people who have been friend more than three years. It is very rare that a relation between two person persists untill the end of highschool.
To wrap it up, based on what was mentioned before, in search of happiness, I highly recommend to make new friends in order to earn more money through your connections. This action not only opens a new storage of new stories and experience but also prevents you from fighting with your old fellows.
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Essay evaluation report
On of the most controversial question
On of the most controversial questions
making new friends broaden your connection
making new friends broadens your connections
Sentence: Whenever a new person talks to you, the person would retell or talk about something about his perivous knowledge on a subject or an experience he had in past.
Error: perivous Suggestion: perilous
Sentence: Finally, being friend with someone for a long period of time can be exhusting.
Error: exhusting Suggestion: exhausting
Sentence: Eventually, you get tired of the repeatition and you seek a new face to talk to.
Error: repeatition Suggestion: repetition
Sentence: According to a survey conducted in our school, most of the fights in the school happen amoung those people who have been friend more than three years.
Error: amoung Suggestion: among
Sentence: It is very rare that a relation between two person persists untill the end of highschool.
Error: highschool Suggestion: high school
Error: untill Suggestion: until
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2004 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.338 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.255 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.736 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: ON_OF_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: One
...come very sad to continue living in it. On of the most controversial question rega...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...d career that earns you a lot of money. Some of the jobs are related to having connection w...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 207, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ge on a subject or an experience he had in past. The new stories that you hear can be v...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 47, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...y, being friend with someone for a long period of time can be exhusting. Imagine you see the s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 235, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... and you seek a new face to talk to. It doesnt matter if the person is your close frie...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, may, regarding, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2063.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4847826087 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34029690489 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50652173913 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7189211029 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.578947368 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2105263158 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301141892636 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101482966552 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071313593107 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182311915276 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682641120771 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.