TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated world, everyone needs to follow and obey the rules, but sometimes these rules become more difficult and too strict for people, especially for the youngest people. Most people believe this kind of rule is necessary, and everyone should follow them, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, these rules are important for the future of the country and it is a fact, but the government should consider this issue that the future of the country belongs to young people, so most of the rules should be changed at this time and in such a sophisticated environment. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that nowadays with developing online word and increases the internet between young people, they live in another world that maybe not exist physically but is very important for them, so the government should be aware of changing the world, and adapted the rules with this circumstances. the government should involve young people in many situations, and after that teach them to become responsible people in their lives. For example, in my country, most of the rules are too strict and people my age do not like to follow these rules, but in the recent year, the government decided to change some of these rules and improve them in a good way, such as change the old way with a new one in the internet material. Nowadays most of the works or business going on in the social network, and everyone wants to work in such a comfortable environment.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that when the government makes the young people follow the rules, they going to refute them more than ever, so is much better for everyone, especially for governments to encourage people with something beneficial for them, I believe it is proper to brings up an example about my experience related to this subject. When I was going to high school, there was some kind of rules that everyone has to follow, but most of that rules were so strict, and most of the time students do not follow and obey them. After a while, the high school president decided to arrange some beneficial things to encourage us to follow the rules, and also they ask about the previous rules and changed based on students' opinions. After a short, while everyone obeys the rules but not with force, students were doing that by their choice.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that the government or generally some people in charge should make the rules more flexible for everyone to people do it with their choice not by force, in this circumstances we could build a wonderful future for our country. In fact, there is a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be mentioned but is not embraced due to the dearth of time.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, if, may, so, whereas, while, as to, for example, in fact, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2464.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77519379845 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6070696367 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432170542636 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.2742142326 48.9658058833 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.0 100.406767564 175% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.8571428571 20.6045352989 179% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214184613433 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842051866499 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502240006843 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142556207739 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358236941849 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 11.7677419355 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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