TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Strict rules that young people should obey, an important elemnet of quality life, have been valued and evern triggers a heated discussing over society today. The principles that young people should follow, in some people's views, is too strict. Contrary to these people's opinion is my perspective that obey these rules is beneficial, due to contributions to person itself and society.

What must be prioritized first is that following the rules is good for people themselves, instead of breaking them. To begin with, people could find the drawbacks of themselves when they want to do something that break the rules. To be sepecific, these problems will grow into a bad concequence if people do not notice them and fix them; Moreover, repairing the shortage is another way of cultivating their personalities. In detail , understanding what you are doing is best way of knowing yourself; however, if someone did something bad and even do not know what he did, it will finally be a criminal.

What equally worth discussing is that obeying the principles is benefit for society. Initially, as the time goes by, recelnly society has more requests for people than before. Specifically, it is the evidence of social development. Addtionally, the society will be peace and happiness if everyone obeys the rules; however, without following, the total community will become a hell because of the crime. To explain it deeper, no one is a saint and never make minstakes, but after doing them, people should have the willing to fix the problems.

To conclude, only by following the strict social rules can poeple and society became better.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 263, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...views, is too strict. Contrary to these peoples opinion is my perspective that obey the...
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Line 4, column 432, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ltivating their personalities. In detail , understanding what you are doing is bes...
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Line 4, column 468, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...tail , understanding what you are doing is best way of knowing yourself; however, if so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1370.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11194029851 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74349442379 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619402985075 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7088086364 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.384615385 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69230769231 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245137654491 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881298821862 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068443970509 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156598622339 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637741128286 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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