Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that attention to artworks decreases between people and most of the artist have difficulty for exhibition, sale and observe audience. So now art need an assist from the government to power itself and come back to its previous position. Contrary to this popular belief there are still those who argue that today people need interesting entertainments to relax own minds and make them happy, this point required more government investment in improving fundamental facilities for athletics. However, I to a great extent, agree with this idea that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics.
First and foremost, arts have a permanent effect on human minds in the cause of happiness. All of the people have an experience of visiting an art museum or gallery. Watching different kinds of painting or sculptures not only impress people feeling, but also is an amazing entertainment. People think about this wonderful artworks for some next days and admire its creators. On the other hand, athletics could just provide temporary happiness by ingesting adrenalin hormone in the body, therefore, its effects are just for a few hours. In addition, often after the match the loser team become angry, do aggressive behaviors such as damage to facilities and each other.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that art enriches cultural values in each society. We do not look at arts only for entertainment. Art is the representative of our culture and tradition. For example, the Iranian carpet is one of the oldest known artworks in the world. It demonstrates impressive Iranian knowledge in producing fiber, coloring industry, map painting and weaving. Moreover, these carpets are mostly shows Iranian garden that is one special architectural design in our country.
Finally, yet importantly, government by increases investment to improve arts will develop public knowledge in this important field. Unfortunately, today people have very few information about precious artworks even very famous ones. By inviting people to enjoy the artworks, the government can help resurgence art industry and artist which now are in the difficulty because of lack in people attending to watching and buy art products.
On the basis of reasons that was mentioned above, I am convinced that spending money in the arts is more important matter than serving this money for athletics. Because art is able to gather people together, indicate nations' cultural values and increase people artistic information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
... human minds in the cause of happiness. All of the people have an experience of visiting a...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
.... Unfortunately, today people have very few information about precious artworks eve...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little information'.
Suggestion: little information
.... Unfortunately, today people have very few information about precious artworks even very famou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2188.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33658536585 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85832014497 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590243902439 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0060545143 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.19047619 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5238095238 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09523809524 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16196787421 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481344629614 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862477329725 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909882379859 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568078352587 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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