Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Governments are the vital part of societies and play an important role in it. One the most significant duties of government is that in which field governments should invest and spend money. With this in mind, some people believe that governments should spend more money on the arts, while others hold the opinion that it is better for governments to invest in state-sponsored Olympic teams. I, personally speaking, do believe that it is a good idea to spend money on arts. there are some grounds to champion my point of view, two of which are increasing the happiness of people and inclining people to do some artwork. In the following paragraphs, I will substantiate my ides.
To begin with, the more government support the arts in term of money, the happier will be the people. Arts have quite a few fields, such as painting, writing, cinema, and poetry to name but a few. If governments support these kinds of arts, experts in those fields will be encouraged to put all their hearts to do their best to speak with people through the language of arts. Moreover, this support in terms of money has a profound impact on society, for not only artists want to satisfy government and people, but they will show how expertise they are. Consequently, the society will be amused and pleased with masterpieces of experts. by holding some art exhibition around a country in which people will be familiar with arts, masterpieces, and also artists, people will be happier than before because the can forget the hectic life at the moment they are watching arts' product. Seldom do I see that people who were visiting art exhibitions were not happy.
The other equally significant reason which is worth mentioning is that by supporting arts country will benefit from the arts in term of tourists and selling some arts' product to other countries. If the government financially support artists they will be able to introduce their art to people all around the world. By doing so, artists might be able to sell their product to foreign people. Moreover, showing these arts to people will motivate them to visit the country in order to learn about the arts and also to be an apprenticeship. As a result, the tourist industry will be enhanced. Consequently, tourists can play a prominent role in the country's economic.
All in all, by taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, one can conclude that governments should spend more money in arts that other field, for not only do arts increase the happiness of people, but they help a country to benefits from them as well. I firmly recommend governments to support arts in terms of allocating more money to them in comparison to other fields such as sports teams.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, moreover, so, well, while, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83440860215 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67604490351 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460215053763 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4838723164 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.047619048 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261299837938 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087684822352 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732086529122 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178172012713 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400060015304 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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