By and large, it is established beyond doubt that people have been living in a complex era. In this regard, every government tries to invest in the different era in order to make the world a better place for living. A hot debate is raised that the government should pay money in support of the arts or it should pay more attention to the athletics. As for this writer’s opinion, I subscribe to the former idea. In what follows, I will elaborate on the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason is that people will get high inspiration to get involved in the artworks. It is crystal clears that a lot of ordinary people cannot attend to artwork just because they do not have money. As the way of illustration, my friend is a painter and she has been painting since she was 6 years old. Unfortunately, her parents are poor and they have never supported her to establish an exhibition and shows her works in art’s world. I believe that had she supported by someone she would have famed in this career; however, not only does no one support her but also she decides to quit painting. This example clears how much supporting people in the art can motivate people to continue and participate in artworks.
Furthermore, art is a representation of every society’s culture. It is essential for governments to familiarize other countries with its own culture and bold it all around the world. The more money the government pays in art, the more ardent people all around the world will be attracted by the culture. As the way of illustration, in my country, Iran, traditional music is a unique form of art. Several years ago, the government has paid money in this area in order to inspire musicians to create concerts in Europe and Asia continent. In this way, people from different countries could be familiar with this kind of music. Today, after several years, the demand for learning this kind of music increases because they were inspired by this music. As this example illustrates artworks can affect people from different cultures by culture transferring.
To put it briefly, as I mentioned above, one can infer that how much artworks are important for a society because not only people who work in the art need financial supports but also art refers to cultural transferring between countries. As for this writer’s advice, I highly urge the governments to put their money into art instead of athletics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, as for, kind of, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81534772182 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78677917471 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515587529976 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7198130606 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.619047619 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167651179366 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511913276233 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537477182979 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109944998826 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190625247959 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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