Nowadays, every society has variety programs in which it invests in order to thrive various aspects of people’s lives. In this regard, there are always many arguments between politicians about which aspect is more crucial than others; land exploration, education or health care? Some governors believe that government should pay more attention on education systems and sciences. However, others look through different lens. From my perspective, I believe people need health care and also equipped health centers which spread over the country. Because, healthy body means existence of more labor force and consequently more products.Also, diseases can prevalent in society easily if there is no care. I will elaborate on my reasons in following paragraphs.
First and foremost, society has no output if government does not care bout people’s health. As scholars said “healthy mind exists in healthy body”, people need healthy cares in order to have healthy mind. Because all of us carry out our work by our mind’s commands. Therefore, everyone needs enough health care to have health body, as a result, to have health mind. In this regard, government should provide health insurance for labor force whose productivity is crucial for whole society. For instance, they require some health centers around their work environment which check up their well being every three months. As I proposed above, society can not be productive without health supports.
Secondly, diseases and illnesses can prevalent easily and transform from one to another. If people do not care of their health and also have no health supports from government, diseases prevail would threat the whole society. Even person who cares about his or her health can not resist in this harmful environment. Therefor, everyone un intentionally would expose to death and harsh diseases. For example, consider HIV virus from which can be transformed one to another unconsciously and unfortunately there is no cure and medicine for this virus. So, I believe that government should establish health care centers to provide necessary information and prevention measures for this virus for people since prevention is better than cure. In the end, health cure is requisite to abandon prevalence of illnesses.
In conclusion, I strongly believe in the importance of health care in every society. By health supports from government, people can perform their work productively and also they can prevent from prevalence of harsh diseases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46803069054 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80999806318 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53452685422 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0526814705 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9565217391 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0422210046462 0.236089414692 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0148447894883 0.076458572812 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0199356425833 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0265419369318 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215711111988 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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