The money spent by the government should actually be used to improve people's lives and bring good welfare for the citizen. Some people think spending more money on art than on athletics is better to improve people's recognition of the art. Others think spending more money on art won't actually improve people's life. I agree with the government should spend more money on the arts than on the athletics for reducing the sensitivity of distance with art and helping people recall their memory.
I agree with the government spends more money on the arts for reducing the sensitivity of distance with art. In most people's lives, we seldom have the opportunity to contact with the art. It makes most people think art is a miserable and hard to understand. With the support provided by local government, it can adjust people’s recognition to the art. For example, people often think art is viewed by up-class people or decorated in the house of wealthy people. But through the exhibition hold by the local government, it gives most people the opportunity to view the excellent work and reduce the barrier of contacting with the art. From the local government support, people can discover the inspiration of some work come from daily life. It not only reduces the distance between people and art, it also increases people’s interesting to the art.
I agree with the government spends more money on the arts for helping people recall their memories. As I mention previously, after people graduated from the school, they seldom spend their time contacting with the art. By government’s support, people can reconstruct the relationship with art and recall some memory of their young period. For example, Tainan city government through collecting local artists’ works to host an exhibition. The works depicting about early Tainan rural life and landscapes let those older people recall the environment they had ever experienced before. Therefore, the works make older people have stronger relationship with local region.
Some people think spending more money on the art can make people’s realization become stronger. Others think spending more money on the art can’t actually improve people’s living quality. Although spending more money on the athletics can notice people the importance of exercising, art can effectively improve the cultural standard of the nation. So, I agree with government spending more money on the art because it can reduce the barrier for someone who wants to realize the art and make the elder recall the memory.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21980676329 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75693186252 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.400966183575 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1867808078 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2272727273 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8181818182 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.31818181818 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221474726865 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10109442439 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706736817318 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173026583928 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366668978812 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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