TPO- 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, we see many great painters, music composers, and other artists in different fields of art. But these days the society mostly focuses on other aspects like sports. There is a controversial question due to whether the government should spend the budget on sports or on art? Personally, I believe it is crucial to devote the governments' money on art because of two major reasons, both of which are mentioned in the following essay.
To begin with, there are countless big companies like Qatar airways or Betwin which support sports teams. For instance, you may see bay now there are various companies' names on the football clubs T-shirt. thereby, it is crystal clear that these sports teams have sponsors who support them. However, This is not the same in the art field. Not only do they not have any sponsor but also artists must pay considerable money to rent a place for their gallery. I have a cousin who is a great painter. although he has won a lot of national and international competitions, nobody helps him to establish his own class to teach young people interested in the painting and he has no choice except to work as a taxi driver to pay his bills. In my opinion, it is a governments duty to help these kinds of artists to not face a problem, so it leads them to focus on their job as a teacher to foster another great artist in our future generation.
Secondly, while most of the people in the past were interested in art, these days we see limited individuals who are eager to watch the arts. It is only because they have not seen any art program on Tv and the only thing they watch is football matches. Thus, governments ought to help the artists to have significant programs both in Tv and throughout the country in a gallery shape. The artists must be protected as they were in the past. We know lots of artists from ancient times but is there any famous sportsman from those times? Illustrates the fact that in past empires encourage artists to build prominent objects. My cousin who I mentioned before always complains about the situation. He and his friends went to the organization that conducts the Tv channels to establish a channel by which spread the art across the country. But the organization did not help them. On the other hand, we see every day lots of news about the money which alloted to enhance the sports stadiums.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments in my point of view it is important and vital to help artists since they are an important element of each society. So the budget must be spent on art more than now.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: governments'; government's
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Suggestion: Although
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Suggestion: governments'; government's
...o pay his bills. In my opinion, it is a governments duty to help these kinds of artists to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60300429185 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56282209 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523605150215 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6663695461 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.375 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121276345256 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344353572235 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430071670057 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0757093859121 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037677471515 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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