Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary era, there are various kinds of manufactories with different products across the world that want to sell their products as large as possible in scale so as to not fall behind rivals. In order to get to this point, advertisement is one of the best ways to be used. Now, there is a controversial question as to whether this selling method demonstrates some unreal facts about that specific good or not? Although some people are an opinion that these shows are real without any lie, Personally, I strongly believe factories exaggerate their products' quality in the advertisements because of several reasons, both of which will be mentioned in the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind immediately pondering this issue is the fact that some companies are aware of the quality of their products, and they know if the consumers know about it, they will not pay money for invaliuable goods. So the first option that they have is nothing but making a stunning advertisement. While some people are totally aware of this trick, there are numerous individuals who are influenced by these kinds of shows. Most of who will be regret when they get that particular device and use it for a short time. To shed more light on this matter, I am going to mention my own experience regarding this fact. When I was a kid, there was an attractive toy shown in all of TV channels in my country. Being eager to have one of those, I push pressure on my parents to buy one. Although my father told me that toy, a remote control car, would not be as same as what I saw on the TV, I cried many times to convince them to buy it. After lots of arguments, my father bought that car for me. When I started to play with it, I recognized it was not what I thought, and my parents were right about it. So I was angry why they showed unreal picture of remote control car on TV.
Secondly, these days with the advent of technology, most of the factories use some computer effects in their advertisment in order to make it more attractive for viewers. Makers of these type of clips try their best to show their ability in their career and because of that we see many commercial shows on the TV in which there is a products unsimilar to its origin. Somehow this difference between the main good and the thing that we see in advertisemnet is not the Producer factory’s fault. To illustrait my viewpoint, my father have an icecream manufactory. We have a type of icecream which is really delicious and it is like a tedy bear. As you know making an icecream looks exactly like a bear is an impossible deed. Not having an ability regarding this matter, About advertisement we have cooperated with a graphist. Mohammad, the graphist, makes great advertisements for us in which he uses some graphic effects to make it more attractive. While our products looks roughly as a tedy bear, in the commercial advertisement it looks like a real bear. To sum up, some times there is a little difference between the real product and the thing that people watch on the TV or other advertisement, because of technological effects to make the show better.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments, while we see various advertisements that show completely different thing in comparision with the real product to tempt their consumers to buy it, there are others which use some slight effects to make their show more attractive. But the inevitable fact is that we can not find an advertisement in which the product looks exactly like the origin one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... products as large as possible in scale so as to not fall behind rivals. In order to get...
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Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... Now, there is a controversial question as to whether this selling method demonstrates some u...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are a products'?
Suggestion: there are a products
...any commercial shows on the TV in which there is a products unsimilar to its origin. Somehow this d...
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Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a product' or simply 'products'?
Suggestion: a product; products
...rcial shows on the TV in which there is a products unsimilar to its origin. Somehow this d...
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Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y delicious and it is like a tedy bear. As you know making an icecream looks exact...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, as to, you know, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2943.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 634.0 407.700716846 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64195583596 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01790360848 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74821575693 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441640378549 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 931.5 618.680645161 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2375494016 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4814814815 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150673284176 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432393444057 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037697123743 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101075620719 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261449862238 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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