Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
There is no shortage of opinions that advertisements make products seem the same as they actually are. This strategy makes loyal customers as they get same stuff as advertised. Also, its gains consumer confidence towards that company. I have a different opinion. I strongly believe that companies make products looks much better then originally they are.In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons to support that companies makes their products more appealable than they are in reality.
To begin with, the first exquisite point to be mentioned is that to make more sales and buildup more consumers is every company's aim when they launch their product. Moreover, it's a human nature that we attrack towards beautiful things. As a result, when company advertise any of the product they make sure it seems presentable and acceptable to their audience so that they purchase it. To exemplify, when my uncle launched his cosmetic brand in 1998, he make sure the model he hire for her brand must look pretty. Although, the products initially launched might not be of up-to-date quality but good looking model has turn a huge customer traffic. Therefore, this example illustrates that companies portray their products in a way that they look more nice.
Secondly, to explain broadly, the main aim of advertisement is to engage more and more customers. Consequently, when they saw some appealing products , they get an urge to atleast try it once. For instance, it is best explained by my own personal experience, when I was in sixth standard a new bubble gum was launhed. To add on, they make such a good advertise that when a kid eat that gum he gets energetic and lively. Because of this I insisted my parents have that gum. Thus, this experience taught me that if I didn't get attracted by the adversitment, I might not get that product as that tastes horrible.
IN conclusion, although some people believe that advertisments doesnot make products seems much better then they really are. I certqainely believe that it is a common practice that companies make their products looks more good and presentable then they are in reality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96685082873 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70412021973 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546961325967 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5621185888 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6315789474 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94736842105 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243040897619 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781483633264 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808344610417 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172692379376 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684933663268 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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