Government should spend finance in arts field like they spend on athletes
Do u agree or disagree
There is no shortage of opinions that the government should spend money on atheletes. Sports have always had a positive impact on the nation. Also, it motivates youth to be more fit and functional.However, I have a different opinion. I strongly believe that the state should also finance arts. In the following essay, I intended to put forth my points and reasons to support.
To begin with, the first exquisite point to be mentioned is that art is a fundamental part of any nation. A nation is recongnized by their art and culture. Moreover, it gives a glimpse of the people's thoughts and living. To exemplify, when we study the old indus civilizations, we research their arts and craft. To add on, these arts and crafts show how civilized and skilled. However, if they don't have any piece of art we can never know how advanced they are. Evidently, this endorsed that the state should take interest in promoting arts in order to progress a nation. This can only be achieved when the government spends money on it. Therefore, this example illustrates that spending money on arts is very important for the prosperity of the country.
Secondly, to explain braodly, it also provides the people with entertainment and pleasure. Moreover, many people find this as an unwinding therapy from the daily chores. For instance, it is best explained by my own personal experience, I alaways inclined towards arts as therapy. I found it soothing and connected to some spiritual powers. Some years ago, when i was residing in a hostel in another counrty and dealing with the feeling of loneliness. I found arts as a my companion and get me connected to my people. On the other hand, if it's not in my reach I would go into anxiety and depression. Thus, this experience taught me that if government spend finance on arts it would be beneficial in so many ways .
In conclusion, although sme people believe that spending money in athelets is more important and friutful. I certainly have a firm believe that spending capital on arts would be helpful for both the country and the people living in it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79778393352 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79434056331 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545706371191 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.9842115063 48.9658058833 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.1666666667 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0416666667 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226876518209 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610365150473 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065961356225 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136722019651 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340303333803 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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