Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people argue that many commercial advertiser broadcasted the products that seems best as it is actually authentic in real because they believe that if they does not make genuine advertisement or phony advertisement then, they obviously they will huge clients and consumers and they know that disloyalty could pay them a lot .However, in my opinion, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that most commercial advertisement are far less authentic than it shown in television in magnificent ways. I will support my view with two reasons.
To begin with, most commercial advertising explores the art of influencing human behaviors to make certain purchase decision, and they will try to tap into emotional needs to satisfy their clients. For instance, every Coca-Cola advertisement tries to sell us happiness, not the product itself. The goal of all their ads to impact the viewer in some way. They want to make us have the idea that if we buy their products we are going to happier. It is important to explores strategy to influence human behaviors to encourage consumers willingness to purchase because if the advertisement does not do so then they would not gain profit which is main motto of companies. Thus, almost all commercial advertisement products which only manupulate consumers, but not real in nature.
Secondly, generally, all advertisement companies make products which only look better, but in reality their efficacy is low because they make us believe that the product can change our lives. For example, the perfume advertisement by Paco Rabaree shows us more glamour and confidence when using their perfume. It is crucial because to change our lives because it helps to revive in new ways and makes us more confidence to succeed in life. Therefore, most advertisement make bogus advertise than actually it worth.
Finally, the issue of whether advertiser makes color, vibrant products than they are in real is complex. Some people suggested that advertiser make authentic advertisement as it is happen in real because to be loyal to their consumers and to gain their long-term benefit by trustworthiness from their costumers. Nevertheless, I still contend that most advertisements is just counterfeit and advertiser actually influence the consumers mind to make believe that the products would brings happiness, and completely change the life of consumers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: do
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...to make believe that the products would brings happiness, and completely change the li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35340314136 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96151521231 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507853403141 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.249868914 48.9658058833 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 136.333333333 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4666666667 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9333333333 5.45110844103 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265895347154 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991866935134 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605707362712 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179198200016 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286970918755 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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