Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Even though some people are inclined towards the attribute that Television Advertisement should not target young kids. While, others hold the opposite perspective. No one can deny the fact that there are both positive and negative aspects of targeting young children as audience. I personally, though, believe that advertisement on television must not be directed towards toddlers(aged two to five). In the following essay, I will put forth my reasons regarding this statement.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that advertisement are created in order to attrack audience for that product. However, when television commercials are directed towards young kids, it will be a comlpete loss of capital as kids now-a-days are not much into T.V. On top of this, kids aged two to five don't have much understanding of the things going around them. They have their own fasinating world. Thus, if the television commercials are targeted toddlers, it will of no use and is a loss of creative thinking and ideas.
Secondly, to explain it more broadly, in today's era people specially toddlers are more towards latest gadgets rather watching televison. Moreover, if older kids are kept in consideration while making a masterpiece of advertisement, it will give a wide array of ideas to audience. Also, kids lose thir interest in academics and waste their precious time. I have to admit that this can be best explain by a vivid example of one of my relative. He has kid aged 3 years, she get too much addicted to television because of these commercials. As a result, she become too cranky and her behaviour also get affected. In beginig they were not able to figure out the actual cause but after some research they came to know she is get influenced by one of the commercial. Therefore, if they are making advertisment directed towards such a small children, experts should be really very vigilant as it is a crucial topic.
To conclude, in the light of above mentioned reasons and example that it may effect kids academics as well as behaviour. To add on, it may also have a negative impact on company's revenue as kids are more inclined towards gadgets like tablets and cell phones. I will strongly recommend people to consider above reasons and example before making a choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94791666667 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79197759463 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557291666667 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6177094885 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317098021165 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808285617531 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116591298497 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193176259096 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125128888828 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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