Without any shadow of doubt, the media has profound impact on modern people, especially young generations. Some think that there should be restrictions on advertisements, targeting children up to five years old due to the serious impacts these kinds of advertisements have on them. Others, on the other hand, have the opposite viewpoint, believing that there is not necessarily to impose restrictions on such advertisements. As far as I am concerned, I hold the former opinion since these kinds of advertisements are harmful for children since they are very impression, physically and emotionally. In the following argument, some evidence is addressed to substantiate my point of view.
To start with, television advertisements aiming young children have detrimental effect on children's health. Most advertisements shows interesting and inducing scenes of unhealthy foods such as chips and fast foods, stimulating children to eat these foods. When parents bring their children to a supermarket, every now and then, children insist to convince their parent to buy for them chocolates, chips and biscuits. Suffice to say that, fast food restaurants such as McDonalds and KFC contribute millions of dollars for advertisement in TV and as a result both the young generation and parents like to try foods in these restaurants rather than eating homemade food which has much more ingredients and vitamins. Airing advertisements also encourage children having sedentary lifestyle. Instead of going out and playing with other children, they sit in their home and watching TV advertisements since these programs are very attractive for them. If parents and the government as a whole like to have well-being future generation, they should control children watching advertisements. As all these examples have clearly shown, advertisements have serious effects on the health of our next generations and there should be some restrictions regarding broadcasting advertisements which target children .
In addition, advertisements have adverse impact on social development of the children if they air without suitable control system. Nowadays, children reluctantly engage in conversations and they are inclined to play with their IPad or watching TVs. TVs programs especially advertisements has caused children to be isolated themselves. Consequently, children cannot make connection with the others, the trend which will have detrimental effects on their future life as an adult. Moreover, some advertisements show aggressive and action scenes which motivate aggressive and unacceptable behaviours. All these effects would have serious ramifications for our children. Therefore, putting ban on advertisements goes a long way towards having mentally grown up people who can engage in social social activity and use their time more efficiently. Some may claim that advertising industry is an integrated element of having a successful business. However, most of promising and profitable companies gain their reputation from providing high quality and state-of-the-art products rather than waste millions of dollars for advertising their products in TVs. It can undoubtedly understood that without a proper restriction, we cannot expect having mentally healthy and successful people in the future.
In conclusion, I do agree with the notion that advertisements targeting children should be banned. This policy will help children to be more sociable and healthier and finally will go along way towards having better and socially acceptable community in the future.
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...tally grown up people who can engage in social social activity and use their time more effici...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3025.0 1977.66487455 153% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69679849341 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23671930028 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527306967985 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 908.1 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2143477551 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.52173913 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0869565217 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91304347826 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240303386892 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826394859686 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615387963644 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165708867483 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369498430712 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 10.9000537634 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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