Modern technology has caused almost all of well-known companies and educational institutions recruit creative people. Some believe that students should spend most of their times, concentrating to understand the basic facts if they like to be successful in their future career. Others, on the other hand, have the opposite perspective, thinking that being creative and understanding the concepts are much more useful. I hold the latter opinion, since in this modern world, creativity and innovations are the essential factors which guarantee the prosperity and being employed.
To start with, all the modern technologies have been inventing because of creative inventors. When students learn how to create new ideas and concepts, they will be much more helpful in their future jobs. Companies such as Google and Microsoft are established by creative and genius minds. The establisher of Microsoft, Bill Gates, actually abandoned his university as during that time most universities were focussed only basic knowledge and did not value the concepts and novel ideas. If Bill Gates continued his studies, presumably he would not be successful to establish Microsoft. Considering advanced mobiles, laptops, automobiles, airplanes and so on, the importance of being creative will be understood significantly. Focusing only on basic knowledge would forced our minds to just be involved to what our previous inventors, physicians and generally scientists discovered. This strategy stops the mind to think the alternative way, to invent challenging method and finally to encourage to discover and analyse the unknowns. It can be clearly understood that without motivating the students to brainstorm the new ideas and concepts, all these advances were not available today.
In addition, learning basic facts are hard for students and will be forgotten when they will start their future careers. Basic facts are usually complicated and forcing students to learn just the facts will discourage them of continuing their studies. Currently, most of students do not like mathematics because the current curriculum are very basics and students cannot connect the application of mathematics in the real life. Take Australian high schools as an example. Recently, the Australian education institutions have changed the mathematics contents to attract high school students. They have tried to promote the ideas and concepts of creating calculators for example rather than performing complicated mathematical formulas in the courses. The outcome was outstanding and more students have tried to learn mathematics. Furthermore, students will forget all the basic knowledge after few years. The basic information is going to be used only in the exam. Honestly, how many of professional engineers can perform integration calculations. This explanation clearly has shed the light why understanding ideas are paramount.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion of motivating students to learn how to be innovative and how to try challenging and unfamiliar methods. If we like to witness the continuous trend of innovations, our universities might focus more on raising students with creative minds who knows well about ideas and concepts.
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Message: Did you mean 'discovering'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: discovering
...lenging method and finally to encourage to discover and analyse the unknowns. It can be cle...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...of continuing their studies. Currently, most of students do not like mathematics because the cur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, furthermore, honestly, if, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2729.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59221311475 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00265198446 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543032786885 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7772427619 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.961538462 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7692307692 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137305941769 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386982009253 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040294591329 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874008958404 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388525639946 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 86.8835125448 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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