TPO INTEGRATED ELEPHANTS BEHAVIORS 51

Both the passage and lecture is discussing about the common beliefs about elephants. Keeping this in mind, the author introduces tree dominant beliefs about the giant creature. The lecturer, on contrary, disapproves the beliefs and explains that they do not have scientific basis and accordingly provides three interpretations for the misunderstood beliefs.
First, both the reading and speaking materials argue elephant’s ability in faithfully recognizing their death time. In this vein, the writer states that the animals know the exact time of their death and when they get old they get separated apart from their hard and go near water and die there where public call it as "elephant graveyards". The lecturer, however, opposes the claim by calling it misunderstanding and illustrates that old elephants go to adjacent water to feed the soft grasses due to disability in chewing and their broken teeth. Consequently, their death happens around water nearby.
Second, the both passage and lecture explain the painting ability of elephants. Having this in mind, the writer asserts that the creature have object recognition ability which helps to draw or paint different objects such as flowers and other elephants and etc. Conversely, the professor refutes the assertion by demonstrating that the animal does not understand how to pain an object, however, it just reacts to the strokes of its trainer. People who train an elephant to draw would stroke the creature's ear and it provokes them to draw a line and they just to learn how to draw certain patterns by the tricky training method.
Eventually, the both text and speech illustrate elephants fear of Mince. Accordingly, the author states the animals do scare mice. Oppositely, the professor calls in misinterpretation and explains that elephants do not scare the small creature, however, they just are not familiar with them and it makes them to escape from the possible threatening. To more clarification, she adds that the elephants which are living in zoo do not afraid of the tiny creature because they are familiar with them.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...cts such as flowers and other elephants and etc. Conversely, the professor refutes the a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 496, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'creatures'' or 'creature's'?
Suggestion: creatures'; creature's
...in an elephant to draw would stroke the creatures ear and it provokes them to draw a line...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, apart from, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27678571429 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94871694445 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4234685826 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.2 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0852872314523 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0294059236789 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294628540839 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0479589411928 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305678266033 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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