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It goes without saying that in such sophisticated world in which money is the basis of success, jobs are bridges by which people earn money. In fact, so important are jobs that a plethora of debates has been arisen during history about jobs and the ways to achieve success in jobs. Some people are the leading proponents of the claim that studying hard in school guarantees future job success. However, I firmly believe that the ability to relate well to people plays the most important role in achieving success in future job. The rationale behind this idea will be elaborated upon and exemplified in the ensuing paragraphs by focusing on 2 fundamental reasons.
The first reason which juts of mind is that by relating well to other people, one can bring friendly atmosphere in commonly cold work environment. should one make friendly environment in their job, he will become very popular among not only his or her co-workers but also his or her boss. As a result, so valuable will s/he be for the job that nobody wants to miss him or her. An example can shed light on this claim; take a 23 year old funny engineer for instance and let us assume that he is just hired in a company. before he came to company, the working environment of company was cold and hardly ever does anyone talk to others. after he got the job, he started to talk to everyone and breaks the atmosphere in a way that now there is a really great atmosphere in the office and as a new comer, if he makes mistakes everyone tries to help him owing to the fact that they don't want to miss him.
In approaching this issue, apart from the point I mentioned above, another equally important reason that should be scrutinized is that by relating well to others, one can make connections with lot of people in different fields. having made connections with people in wide variety of fields, one can use their help and advices. I can expand this idea by mentioning the memory about my father's problem that just comes to my mind. my father always relates well with people and I remembered once he had to go to an organization to get permission for his job project. remembering how good my father related to them, employers made the best advices and situation for my father that he could get the permission sooner that he expected.
In summary, taking the aforementioned ideas into consideration, one can safely conclude that for success in a future job, relating well to people is the most important ability one can have and attain.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Should
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Suggestion: is
...oss. As a result, so valuable will s/he be for the job that nobody wants to miss h...
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Suggestion: After
...hardly ever does anyone talk to others. after he got the job, he started to talk to e...
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Message: Did you mean 'newcomer'?
Suggestion: newcomer
...great atmosphere in the office and as a new comer, if he makes mistakes everyone tries to...
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to owe' or 'owe'.
Suggestion: to owe; owe
...kes mistakes everyone tries to help him owing to the fact that they dont want to miss...
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: Having
...with lot of people in different fields. having made connections with people in wide va...
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Suggestion: Remembering
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, well, apart from, for instance, in fact, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2063.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63595505618 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5337275467 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54606741573 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.0412344721 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.352941176 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1764705882 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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