TPO_27_Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The most precious things we have are our desires since without them living life makes no sense. Nevertheless, we sometimes tend to sacrifice our strongest desires in order to survive. Accordingly, I subscribe to the view that we should take advantage of any opportunity we are offered and do not wait for the probable future offers.
Never before has the competition to attain a job been as strict as it is today. In times of high unemployment and scarce job vacancies, everyone has to strive mightily to get one of the jobs on offer. Even the most talented university students cannot find an ordinary job after they graduate, let alone the job they desire. Albert Einstein, the most prominent physicist of all times, is a good example for this. Einstein failed to get an academic job in physics after he graduated. Instead, he was obliged to accept a mediocre job in a patent office to secure his life with Mileva, her first wife, financially.
Moreover, people are free to switch to another job anytime they wish. Some years of working experience can make a working resume distinctive thereby increasing the chance to be acceptable to better institutions and companies. For instance, a university student who has worked as a high school teacher will have a higher chance to meet the criteria of a university for hiring professors, due to the teaching experience he has gained.
In conclusion, I believe that people should accept any job they are offered rather than wait until for an ideal job. There is never a guarantee that if we wait, we will attain the most satisfactory job. Instead, taking the secure job on offer, we can strengthen our resumes, hence live up to the employees' expectations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
The most precious things we have are our desires since without them living l...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Never' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...wait for the probable future offers. Never before has the competition to attain a ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88659793814 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7712001574 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601374570447 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0441704333 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257133536 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08673676254 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061515290361 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147797575128 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632727003939 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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