TPO28-Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past

It has been a controversial topic that whether parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past. As for me, I agree with the statement, and below are my reasons.

First of all, parents care about money, and modern parents possess more money so that they can invest on their children's education. For example, the average Taiwanese parents earn around 200,000 NT dollars per month, meaning they do have some extra money to cultivate their children. They will bring their kids to cram schools for further intensive education. Also, they will take their children to violin or piano classes. As a result, parents nowadays do have more budget on their children's education. On the other hand, 20 years ago, people in Taiwan did not rich enough. The average salary for every family only about 50,000 NT dollars. Parents had to use their salary to pay the rent, and purchase grocery things. Therefore, parents in old days did not have sufficient budget for children's education.

In addition, parents today have fewer kids than parents in the past, so they are albe to get more involved in their kids' education. For instance, I am the only child in my family, so my mom put a lot of effort on educating me different kinds of knowledge. I went to private primary school because my mom wanted her only child to have English class taught by native speakers. Thus, I possess a lot of education resources form parents because I am the only child. On the contrary, when my mom was young, since she had other seven siblings, their parents did not pay a lot of attention on their education. My grandfather had to try his best to earn a living for eight kids, not to mention their education. As a result, parents in the past were not involve in their kids' education because there were too many kids for them to look after.

Last but not the least, parents nowadays care more about their fame than parents in old days, so their will get involved in their children's education in order to maintain their good fame. For example, in Taiwan, some parents will punish their kids if they do not get good grades because they want their children to be doctors or lawyers in the future so that they can tell neighbors that they have a successful sons or daughters. In contrast, two decades ago, Taiwan was in a deflating economy, all parents cared were if they could survive tomorrow. They did not have further effort on how to make their kids educated. As a result, parents in old days did not pay a lot of attention on their kids’ education.

To conclude, it is obvious that parents todays are more dedicated to their children's education. After all, modern parents make more money, modern parents have fewer kids, and modern family are concerned about their reputation more than parents in the past.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 746, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
... a result, parents in the past were not involve in their kids education because there w...
Line 7, column 412, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'son'?
Suggestion: son
...l neighbors that they have a successful sons or daughters. In contrast, two decades ...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, therefore, thus, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, as a result, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72323232323 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38364149161 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434343434343 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5346917233 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.52 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.469521891011 0.236089414692 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168332872054 0.076458572812 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.162250284072 0.0737576698707 220% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.36336719169 0.150856017488 241% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0965085440621 0.0645574589148 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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