TPO31 independent Writing Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past

Over past few decades the advancement in technology has proven to significantly impact the lives of most people in this world. As compared to past, at present people have more feasible access to resources and facilities. In my opinion,people are blissful in the modern world as compared to ancient times. In what follows, I will delve into most outstanding reasons to justify my view point.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned here is that people have more job opportunities as compared to past. In other words, people are more educated and earn better which helps them to live their dreams. Consequently, people are spending more joyful life. However, People in the past had limited access to education and therefore restricted career options. A vivid example, that can shed light on this matter of subject is my grandmother. About 40 years ago, my grandmother in her village received highest education of all girls of her age, which is compared to students passing 5th grade today. All day she had to particpate in houshold chores and nobody in the family encourged her and supported her to become independent woman. As a result, she went through hardships as an adult when her husband abandoned her. She often says that if she had got an opportunity to get education and better careeer, she would not have lived miserable life. Conversly, at present most of the people are independent and can live the life the way they want. Therefore have more reasons to be happy and satisfied.

In approaching this issue, another subtle point that substantiate my view point is that apart from better working life, people have effortless access to travelling around and instant communicating facilities which helps to allievate stress out of their life. For instance, I live overseas and whenever I feel overwhelmed with my work and I call my mother to relieve my burden. On the other hand, people in the past used to write letters and had to wait couple of days before getting response back. To me, it feels like increasing anxiety and stress being unable to connect with someone in need. Furthermore, vacations to different destinations were not so popular back then, which has become inevitable part of people's life nowadyas. As all we know, both communication and travelling, which was unusal in the old times, makes people more stress free and cheerful.

To wrap it up, contemplating all aforemntioned reasons, one will soon realize that with all the changes that has occured over years, people are living more jovial life in the present and are more stress free as compare to the past. Most of the credit for these changes goes to advancement in the technology and improvement in the education field.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , people
... resources and facilities. In my opinion,people are blissful in the modern world as com...
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Suggestion: received the highest
...ears ago, my grandmother in her village received highest education of all girls of her age, whic...
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...nd can live the life the way they want. Therefore have more reasons to be happy and satis...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, apart from, for instance, i feel, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95394736842 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71945298796 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9317970333 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2173913043 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8260869565 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08695652174 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218675667195 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681969300274 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491996093743 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142150315995 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165161924044 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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