Our world is changing rapidly due to the innovative technical improvement. Some people believe that car using will increase by next twenty years; others oppose it. I strongly agree with this point that the number of cars will reduce within two decades. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, new ways of transportation will capture the car place. Mass rapid transition(MRT), Bus Rapid transition (BRT), and metro rail will change the trade of relying on the personal car. This enhancement is already improving people's way of life a lot in the developed country. Moreover, many developing countries also started to implement those technologies to solve their traffic congestion. Since people can save a lot of money and time by using MRT, BRT, or Metro service, they will gradually stop using a car. For instance, I recently read an article on MRT, which is a very common in the whole world, and the report states that in China, Koria, Malaysia, and Japan are enjoying this service and people stop rely on their car. Therefore, I think one day no one needs to use a personal car as they have the more convenient way of movement which is faster and cheaper.
Secondly, people' health concern will influence the use of a car.The overall health concern is growing, and this is a critical factor in this case. The more people become educated, the more they will realize that car is one of the primary reason for air and sound pollution. Those pollution lead us to a dangerous situation by reducing our immunity. As a result, people will go for an alternative less harmful way. My boss experience is a compelling example of this. He was a fan of car driving and used to ride his car during his early life. But he has recently changed his mind because his doctor advised him to avoid riding car. The rationale behind his advice is the dangerous air pollution. After stop driving the car and using MRT for the commute, his health condition improves a lot.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that one day all people will stop using cars. This is because there will be more convenient ways of transportation, and because people will look for the safest journey.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...concern will influence the use of a car.The overall health concern is growing, and ...
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Line 4, column 275, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this pollution' or 'Those pollutions'?
Suggestion: This pollution; Those pollutions
...ary reason for air and sound pollution. Those pollution lead us to a dangerous situation by red...
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Line 4, column 741, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... stop driving the car and using MRT for the commute, his health condition improves a lot. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74352331606 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56517110961 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549222797927 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.107535671 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2272727273 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5454545455 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203056346954 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654050428697 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053271139827 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142818147019 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00957607368529 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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