TPO43Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related

Only one period that always be satisfying and blessed is childhood.Furthermore, everybody are affected in social issues except children.Therefore, I agree with the idea that parents should prefer that their children's utilize of time has to just have fun playing games or sports.There are several reasons to providing that solution which I mention below.
Games, sometimes there are bad consequences, effectively influence children's imagination.It can improve their thought to more broadly and that's going to be help kid's mentality.For example, some arcade games impact them to thinking faster to do their next move.Whether any kind of things, they reflect deeper than children, who don't play any games and then they've got a more advantageous experience than others.
Moreover, exercising any sort of sports is getting children to more responsibility.Also, the affection starts very simple as their daily life will be change such as catching time is one of the impact.Since if we see a any player, playing sport, they all have discipline of nobility.Even though it seems like a little affection, that becomes basis of future's themselves.That influence is important to navigating themselves to good path.
The best usage of time is to having a fun and it becomes happy memory.Perhaps some people has a bad memories as in their childhood period.Thus, that memories bring them to massive darkness in their childhood memories such as doing schoolwork in whole time in their childhood is such a boredom.And in addition, certain schoolwork seems to be enormous pressure for the children.If their children is being a lot of happiness in their thought, they will grow more enthusiastic.
In conclusion, if we realize the true advantage of having fun, there are many beneficial to supporting the idea.Therefore, contemporary's parents really ought to managing their children's time effectively and support them.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, sort of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41077441077 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39054062624 2.67179642975 127% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602693602694 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 20.1344086022 293% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.1893417596 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 321.4 100.406767564 320% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.4 20.6045352989 288% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 28.2 5.45110844103 517% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267304659653 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147807455867 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520968812281 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147807455867 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520968812281 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.8 11.7677419355 287% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.13 58.1214874552 5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.5 10.1575268817 271% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.99 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.55 8.01818996416 132% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 10.002688172 300% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.6 10.0537634409 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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