TPO46 independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-GB">Needless to
say that by the advent of the Internet dramatic alteration has happened in the
world. Actually, the infrastructure of the Internet is prevailing constantly in
most countries. Invariably, most nations invest huge amount of funds to broaden
the access of the Internet. Owing to the importance of the growth of this
facility most assert that the required budget should be provided by government
by eliminating other plans like public transportation. On the contrary, I am
firmly of the belief that allocating adequate fund for public transportation is
more critical than expanding the Internet. The following underlying reasons are
going to substantiate my standpoint.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-GB">The first
fact that holds me this belief is that should government invest on public
transportation, will they solve a critical environmental issue. Actually, by
growing population and civilization, the required facilities for people are not
fairly enough and suitable. Likewise, by renewing the present buses and
increasing number of them, the air pollution will be decreased dramatically.
The stronger is the public transportation, the less the air is polluted. In
this case Tehran is the most crowded city of Iran. I was reading an article
about the significance of investment of government on buses and subway to
improve the public transportation. It mentioned that actually the number of
buses should enhance twice for three years. It mentioned otherwise, living in
this city would be more difficult. Considering this situation, spending money
on less important subjects like Internet appears unwisely.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-GB">Another
reason deserves some words here is that utilizing independent entities to
invest in the Internet would be more profitable for the society. Generally,
there are some corporations that are desired to contract with government and
expand the Internet structure individually. Actually, exploiting advertisements
and web-businesses, this companies can revenue form the Internet. Therefore,
exercising a suitable contract can let the government to pay money for crucial
affairs. simultaneously, the Internet infrastructure will be developed. For
instance, a foreign company became volunteer to provide high-speed world-wide
network for Iran several years ago. Hence, after meeting and some procedures,
they could reach an appropriate agreement. As a result, there is acceptable
Internet facilities in my country without spending huge amount of money by
government.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-GB">In
conclusion, in my opinion allocating money for the Internet instead of public
transportation is not a wisely decision. Actually, public transportation is
more vital than the Internet. Besides, individual entities can found on the
Internet.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...amatic alteration has happened in the world. Actually, the infrastructure of the In...
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...nvest huge amount of funds to broaden the access of the Internet. Owing to the im...
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...dget should be provided by government by eliminating other plans like public tra...
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...ate fund for public transportation is more critical than expanding the Internet. T...
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Suggestion: Transportation
...at should government invest on public transportation, will they solve a critical environment...
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Suggestion: Fairly
...equired facilities for people are not fairly enough and suitable. Likewise, by renew...
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...se, by renewing the present buses and increasing number of them, the air pollution will ...
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...ion, the less the air is polluted. In this case Tehran is the most crowded city of...
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... of government on buses and subway to improve the public transportation. It mentioned...
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...mentioned that actually the number of buses should enhance twice for three years. I...
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...rs. It mentioned otherwise, living in this city would be more difficult. Consideri...
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Suggestion: Invest
...hat utilizing independent entities to invest in the Internet would be more profitabl...
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...sired to contract with government and expand the Internet structure individually. Ac...
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.... Actually, exploiting advertisements and web-businesses, this companies can reve...
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...-businesses, this companies can revenue form the Internet. Therefore, exercising a...
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...e government to pay money for crucial affairs. simultaneously, the Internet infrastru...
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...ent to pay money for crucial affairs. simultaneously, the Internet infrastructure will be de...
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...teer to provide high-speed world-wide network for Iran several years ago. Hence, afte...
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Suggestion: Transportation
...ey for the Internet instead of public transportation is not a wisely decision. Actually, pub...
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...stead of public transportation is not a wisely decision. Actually, public transportation is m...
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...n. Actually, public transportation is more vital than the Internet. Besides, indiv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, hence, if, likewise, so, therefore, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2754.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.68446601942 4.8611393121 138% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.37022009163 2.67179642975 201% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526699029126 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.51630824373 125% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 82.6267943561 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.739130435 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9130434783 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5652173913 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 41.0 4.53405017921 904% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0498980657703 0.236089414692 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0164879408872 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.022137708245 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0145414019263 0.150856017488 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029894993634 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.84 58.1214874552 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 21.17 10.9000537634 194% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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