TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans
become successful in the future life is one of the most critical concerns of any person. Needless to say that obtaining success consist of various features should a person gather them. some people may believe that comminucation ability is a crucial for the future success whereas others would take the reverse concept. some students charactrized relating well as more important since they could peresent any thing their want. Nevertheless, I firmly of the beilief that hard working and studying are infinitely preferable. The following reasons are going to substantiate my stand-points.
The first fact that holds me this view is that by studying hard people can learn any thing they require for entire life. it can be illustrated that students whom study hard in the university learned more than their classmate as they realized high knowledge and self researching. The best way to increase success rate for the future is that knowing more about business, art, science; since, it become really affordable if students know how to search about it. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, I realized that I must improve our production and selling method on the market; so, I called one of my genuis friend in the field of business manegment. Consequently, he learned me how can improve our business by lowest cost. thus, this opportunity wouldn't happen if my friend weren't study hard in the college.
Another reason is that with studying hard students could learn more experience for theirselves or by helped of teachers. I read several articles about grade one students at the Iranian science journal three years ago. they analyze the various impacts of hard working on the entire career life; hence, assume that grade one students are remarkably better on their career since they actually know more about their major. one of the articles estimates that they achieve high income worke approximately 20 percent better than others. I can remember my personal experience when I studying power electronics at the Sharif university about nine years ago. I had many issues with my induction motors lesson and gained really low number on them. After a while, I spoke with our grade one classmate to teached me induction motors; therefore, I obtaind perfect number on them even some of others high comminucation classmate got a bad situation on that lessons. thus, it seems reasonable to assume from this experience that hard studynig is make any things affordable for anyone.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept, hard studying is only thing becoming successful needs. Not only because of improvment accurred in students featur, but also since its high positive effect on the experience for the future life. Every students should make their all effort on the university.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Become
become successful in the future life is one of...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...s features should a person gather them. some people may believe that comminucation a...
^^^^
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... others would take the reverse concept. some students charactrized relating well as ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 405, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...ore important since they could peresent any thing their want. Nevertheless, I firmly of t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
... that by studying hard people can learn any thing they require for entire life. it can be...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...any thing they require for entire life. it can be illustrated that students whom s...
^^
Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...about business, art, science; since, it become really affordable if students know how ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 803, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...an improve our business by lowest cost. thus, this opportunity wouldnt happen if my ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 826, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... by lowest cost. thus, this opportunity wouldnt happen if my friend werent study hard i...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 854, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...opportunity wouldnt happen if my friend werent study hard in the college. Another re...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one student', 'a student', or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: one student; a student; students
...rs. I read several articles about grade one students at the Iranian science journal three ye...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ranian science journal three years ago. they analyze the various impacts of hard wor...
^^^^
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one student', 'a student', or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: one student; a student; students
...e career life; hence, assume that grade one students are remarkably better on their career s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
...y actually know more about their major. one of the articles estimates that they ach...
^^^
Line 5, column 574, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...an remember my personal experience when I studying power electronics at the Shari...
^
Line 5, column 871, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the others') or simply say ''some others''.
Suggestion: some of the others; some others
..., I obtaind perfect number on them even some of others high comminucation classmate got a bad ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 952, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...te got a bad situation on that lessons. thus, it seems reasonable to assume from thi...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, even so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12205567452 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65305221227 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526766595289 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6394943073 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3043478261 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86956521739 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17321068035 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548931588518 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417100259757 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117100727802 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434364338963 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.