The university has provided students who are going to enter university with two summer vacation programmes. Which one do you think is better for students?
1)take some college course in advance of some course that is related to students' major
2) visit some history museums or historical relics
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and a hotly debatable topic what activity and plan would be more beneficial for students before entering the university. Therefore, some people are the leading the proponent of the claim that visiting historical places such museums bring them more benefits. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that taking some courses notably related to their major can be an instructive and useful decision. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. There are some significant reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, the ultimate goals of the university is to prepare students for their future, since they are supposed to attend the society in the near future. To elaborate on, in order to be successful in both their education and especially their future, taking courses related their major, which is strongly effected on their future job, enable them to expand their horizon and increase their knowledge effectively. In addition, they are allowed to find their weaknesses before entering the university. Let me give you an example might make you much more evident. I have applied for a PhD Position at UCL University, I have received an email that I was accepted. But, I know that in order to become successful in my PhD period, I should boost my programming skill, which I have found that it is my weakness during an interview for this project. For this reason, taking some courses or other thing related to courses before attending university give us an insight to us about our ability.
Apart from good preparation, the second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that visiting museum and history places provide an opportunity for the student to become familiar with a lot of students to make friend with them before entering the university. On the other hand, some others believe that making the friend is really important, but taking the course related to their major give student a chance to make friend with students who want to study at the same major. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that not only they can make students who have the same interests, but also they can speak with them to opt the same room at university dorm resulting in progressing in their education. As a result, the more they take a course related to their major, the more it is easy for them to make friends because they want to study in the same major.
To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes the positive importance of taking courses before attending the university inasmuch as in the first place, they can increase their information and find theirs deflects easily, as in the second place they can increase their interpersonal skill by making friend with people who have a close personality with them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 388, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...who have a close personality with them.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, apart from, in addition, as a result, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2514.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86266924565 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59059265542 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464216634429 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 815.4 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.3532778762 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.882352941 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4117647059 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4705882353 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29024013233 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099568594413 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694323150218 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18532202927 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065903855502 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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