the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the long break between semesters. Which of the following would you choose to do?
(A) Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study.
(B) Students must volunteer to work in the university's city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their hometowns.
The university provides two options for the students to work in the break. These two different things both have different aspect of advantages for the students. In my personal, I will choose the first option, attending some other courses between semesters. I will explore the reasons in the following essay.
First of all, learning is the most essential purpose in college. Although I already have a major in the college, if I could have another time to take much more different courses, I will be very happy. Therefore, if the college, coincidently, asks us to make such choices, I will definitely choose to take the other subjects without hesitation. For example, I wish I could spend some time to study English at the university. I want to join the course about the English literature because I always wonder about how the English writer writes the fiction, and how they construct the novel, which is so different to the Chinese writer. But, in the past, I could not understand such knowledge, and no competence to read the profound English literature.
Additionally, studying is a much easier way for me than working in the city. Usually, the works for volunteers are clearing the city or helping the people who live in the town. It needs to spends so many time to finish some kind of works like this, but has little acquired during the process. However, if I choose to take the lesson, it is not only complete the requirement, which the university asked, but also obtain the knowledge in the class. Such knowledge might generate much helping in my future career such as what I mentioned on the above, good ability in English will make students have more opportunity to find good jobs after graduating from school.
In summary, both options are good for students, which could make the students have the diversity of experiences. I am of the opinion that I will choose the first option, which is much suitable for me.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'spend'.
Suggestion: spend
...eople who live in the town. It needs to spends so many time to finish some kind of wor...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...live in the town. It needs to spends so many time to finish some kind of works like this,...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, for example, in summary, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79518072289 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62718986345 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539156626506 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8241469774 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6470588235 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166104152374 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567552952902 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427752842324 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111618818724 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402652799519 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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