This topic asked that what changes make my country more tempting to my peers. Virtually, some people if asked would express that the economy and the education while others would mention that question depend on a great deal of factors, for example, someone may hold the view that agriculture compared to economy. As far as I am concerned, I adopt a firm position that economy as well as education first steps which must be taken so as to make more appealing.
The first reason coming to mind substantiating my stand point is concerned with this issue that is the economy. Certainly, it is core issue of most countries in today's world. The problem generates so many divergent effect on individuals, such as unpleasant salary, poor infrastructure of education, unemployment so on and so forth. These factors induce to the country to be seen unattractive for human being, particularly for young population due to desperation of future. With the help of economical advancement, all issues could be overcame. The best example that fit this notion is the economic strength of America. An exquisite consistency of this system creates countless job opportunities, well income, better social life which lead to the a country to be appealed by creatures. It goes without saying that, being sufficiently well country is first crucial priority to be more tempting for people at my ages.
The second reason which deserve some word here is that a good education system. It is important to consider that we consume more than half of our life time at schools, colleges in order to be good individual to contribute to this developing world. To be able to chase our goals and achieve those, it is indisputable that education play such an important role in our life. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the subject is my own experience. Owing to deficiencies at my high school in my hometown, which are lack of books, internet, library and even teacher sometimes, I had no chance to receive a good quality of training which eventually caused me to work in low pay jobs. Therefore, voluminous people in my town consistently consider migrating to other well developed countries. Significant factor of this notion people have is owing to their children might have better education. Without a shadow of doubt, to wipe this sentiment out from people's mind, I would make greater education infrastructure as well as providing complex sources. Moreover, a noteworthy social survey conducted in my home town states that plethora of residents think that our education and economy system ought to be updated.
Having considered all the aforementioned grounds discusses above, I am of the opinion that by straightening these flaws in my hometown will give rise to hometown being more tempting for my peers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ucation first steps which must be taken so as to make more appealing. The first reaso...
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Line 3, column 516, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sort' or 'these nulls'?
Suggestion: this sort; these nulls
...the help of economical advancement, all these sort of issues could be overcame. The best e...
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Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
...on is the economic strength of America. A exquisite consistency of this system cr...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...ncome, better social life which lead to the a country to be appealed by creatures. It...
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Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...r that we consume more than half of our life time at schools, colleges in order to be goo...
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Line 5, column 677, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider migrating'.
Suggestion: consider migrating
...luminous people in my town consistently consider to migrate to others well developed countries. Sig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, sort of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2304.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9978308026 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87723245474 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548806941432 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8481196447 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.714285714 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9523809524 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125552319174 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362956596999 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046156842385 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929853351033 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540095327688 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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