What measures should government adopt to solve problems in economy?
1: building public library,
2:public transportation system or to
3:organize strong police force
Give your opinion and explain in detail with examples.
There is always a bone contention when it comes to measures taken by government to solve economic problems. Some believe it is better to implement public library to educate people, while others think that it is logical to organize strong police control to eliminate criminal activity. But I believe that expanding and reconstructing efficient public transportation is crucial. I would like to throw light on my opinion in the following essay:
To begin with, large number of people residing in remote areas find struggling to commute to cities for employment. Increase in urbanization especially factories and road demand skilled employees living in suburban. However, inadequate number of workers gives rise of multiple problems in factories mainly reduced efficiency and turn over of essential commodities. For instance, one textile factory situated near my mother’s home encountered many challenges and might shutdown in short period of time because blue collar workers can not afford to travel to cities on their own vehicle. They might exhaust their saving just to travel in need for decent, so they try to make their ends meet by participating in low paying village jobs. As a result, it is prerequisite to organize cheap, accessible and wide spread transportation system mainly buses or subways to increase employment rate, to operate industries proficiently in return boosting economy of a nation.
Secondly, most educational institutions are built in cities triggers the cause of exponentially increase in the rate of literacy in remote areas. Structure of the villages is such as it barely supports any development of universities, thus students are obliged to commute on daily basis to cities to take privilege of teachings offered by learned scholars and highly advanced library. Since most young people cannot bear gas expenses, they are refrained from higher academic studies offered only in cities. For example, once I read in the newspaper that some universities might collapse in future due to a smaller number of admitting students. Moreover, affordable mode of conveyance would increase inflow of curious students from far distances and increase in number of potential candidates required for handling reputed firms. Consequently, it is cogent that public transportation serves as foundation to improve literacy rate in underdeveloped regions thereby boosting economy.
In a nutshell, public transportation is imperial to counteract with the hurdles of fluctuating economy such as low literacy and employment rate. Thus, government should undergo the process of building public transportation system to fascinate more workers and passionate students towards opportunities of megacities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 492, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... challenges and might shutdown in short period of time because blue collar workers can not aff...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in fact, in short, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58111380145 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07529121554 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61985472155 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3236009483 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.588235294 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2941176471 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05882352941 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164464135762 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048597639668 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529564109165 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11494653644 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759855098058 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 58.1214874552 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.01818996416 128% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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