When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?

the educational institute heavily relies on fundings and sometimes when funding is not enough, they have to take a step to curtail some programs/classes or facilities in order to run their institute smoothly. Here in this scenario, the institute has to eliminate class and has to select one to cut, from Physical education or arts and music. In my opinion, I would suggest the institute cut classes of arts and music as it requires costly equipment and benefits are not visible in a short run.

First, Physical education is important for all, irrespective of a student's field. Physical and mental fitness is a key aspect of a person's life. If a person is suffering from physical disability or health issues then he/she might struggle a lot in order to achieve his/her goals, for instance, Father of Deep learning Geoffrey Hinton is suffering from his backbone issues and he could not sit now because he didn't cared about his physical fitness while working a researcher for more than 30 years and now his work is getting affected by his inability to sit. similarly, there are ample athletes and scientists for like Geoffery, their work is getting deterred by their physical inabilities. hence, students should be aware about physical aspects and workouts so that they will achieve their goals without getting into the trouble.

Secondly, If an organization has a good sports team which takes part in competitions, it could represent the organization and could help the organization to get more fundings from different sources. In addition to this, If a educational institute's team gets awared for winning then It could help the institution and it's students to make their institute a better place and they would not have to cut classes to save money.

Moreover, there is Hindi proverb "Savst sharir me hi sawst mashitisk ka vikas hota hai", which means a healthy body grows a healthy mind and hence if the institution is taking care of physcial asspects of the students then it is possible that those students will excel in the educational fields also.

In conclusion, I would prefer to cut arts and music classes if the funding is not enough because of the reasons that I mentioned in the passage.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, while, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96505376344 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75560974621 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545698924731 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.0872452685 48.9658058833 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.916666667 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8333333333 5.45110844103 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182723127334 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791223267363 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544535953597 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105187476561 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655808101085 0.0645574589148 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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