When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can school help these students with their problems? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
Attending of a new school most of the time is very stressful for children. In my opinion, school can help such as students to deal with their problems by providing psychological support. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
First of all, involving kids to a scores of school`s activities can help them feel less lonely. Working hand by hand with other children helps to new students make friends. When students work in a team they communicate tightly, and this, in turn, gives a great opportunity to find someone who share the same interests. My own example illustrates it very well. When being a senior student, my family and I moved to a new town, it was difficult to me to overcome disappointment of loosing old friends. I felt very lonely in the new place. However, new teachers involved me to a variety of projects. In fact, just in a couple of weeks, my sadness came away because I found a myriad of new friends. To that end, with help of the new pedagogues the process of adaptation in the new institution was not difficult to me.
Secondly, proving of professional psychological help is likely to decrease stressfulness of changing of the environment for the child. Professional psychologists are people, who has profound knowledge in children`s world outlook. They know exactly how to talk to young students to help them to overcome changes. As I said above, I moved to the new school when I was a senior student. Right away I was invited to a school`s psychologist. We had conversations twice a week. I recall, that the doctor was very funny and I always left the sessions in a wonderful mood, full of optimism and positive emotions. So, conversations with the psychologist helped me to relive stress dramatically.
To sum it up, I feel that by providing psychological support to new students schools can help children to solve problems. This is because this way kids are likely to feel less lonely and deal with stress. All things considered, it is reasonable to assume that psychological help is necessary to the students who move to a new school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a score' or simply 'scores'?
Suggestion: a score; scores
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the students who move to a new school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, i feel, in fact, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78670360111 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05851798594 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515235457064 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1070814593 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.1304347826 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6956521739 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360396197724 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10281967191 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917799024704 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247162859318 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392080999024 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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