Beyond a shadow of a doubt, it is prevalent among people that they frequently get stuck with a variety of options when they have to choose their ideal job. On that ground, parents could be the best source who can provide them with appropriate solutions since they are the closest to their children. In this regard, many people contend that parents should advise their children to work in their interested field. On the other side, there is a group of people who believe that it is better to prioritize salary while selecting a major. Certainly, from my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that, initially, it seems a little challenging to reach a consensus on this issue, I, to a great extend, believe that students’ performance is utterly dependent on their subject of interest. Consequently, they would perform spectacularly well on those subjects in which they are more interested, whereas their focus might get lost or they might not give their best efforts on subjects in which they are least interested. Similarly, this rule will be applied when they start working following their graduation. To shed more light on this, my brother’s life is a compelling example of what has been elaborated above. My brother was always interested in the music field, nevertheless, he studied marketing as a major subject due to my parent’s willingness to see him working in a big international firm. In reality, when he started his job in the marketing field, it was really difficult for him to showcase his best ability at work since he never wanted to be a part of a marketing firm in his life. Unfortunately, he was fired due to his low performance. Fortunately, meanwhile, he started performing in the orchestra as a guitarist. Surprisingly, within a few years, not only did he become a renowned guitarist in my country, but also, he started earning equally to those who work in the medical field. Ultimately, had he been allowed to become a guitarist at the first attempt, he would never have had to pass through difficulties in his life whereby he was fired. Thus, this consequence enforce me to posit that children should select their career very precisely and accurately in which they are interested.
Another noteworthy reason is that selecting a major based on a high salary might lead to severe negative consequences which probably affect young ones’ mental health as well as their professional life in the future. As a matter of fact, despite the fact that money is a crucial part of our lives especially when children have to make their mind which academic field will serve them higher salary packages, it is not the only subject that parents consider. To exemplify, as I mentioned above, when my brother used to work in a marketing firm, his low performance forced him to start consuming alcohol. In fact, after a few months, he was in mental depression and his life became miserable. Admittedly, it is wise for me to think that parents should reconsider the long-term effects whenever they advise their children to choose a career.
To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks, in spite of the fact that some may not agree with my viewpoint, I radically stand for the notion which suggests that parents should give liberty to their children and not make a salary as their first priority. This is because children might not perform well and lose their job if they are least interested in what they do and because it can damage their profession as well as their personal life too.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, nevertheless, really, similarly, so, thus, well, whereas, while, in fact, as a matter of fact, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.0286738351 245% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 94.0 43.0788530466 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3061.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 623.0 407.700716846 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91332263242 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99599519102 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78327233053 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481540930979 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 940.5 618.680645161 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 4.94265232975 324% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.8555674983 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.541666667 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9583333333 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310469693826 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859308147081 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076237926099 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227222503041 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557456879829 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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