whether should parents tell their children to choose a major leading to a good job with a high salary or to follow a major in which they are interested in?
It goes without saying that in this progressive world, where we live, education is the most important parts of our lives, there has been a controversial debate among parents as to whether students should choose a major leading to a job with a high salary without taking children's interests in considerations. From my perspective, students should opt for their major on the basis of their desires and interests, and two reasons to support my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, studying in a major that is interesting, students are more likely to be successful individuals in the future. It is not a secret to anyone that the key for being successful individuals is having passions, meaning when students like their study field they will make the most of their attempts and efforts to graduate and acquire a great deal of knowledge. I am of the opinion that for being an expert in a field, people have to work hard and be diligent; otherwise, they cannot reach their goals, and this diligence is not be created unless by having passions and interests because these factors prevent people especially students from giving up. To put it in more vivid picture, when I was in high school my parent told me to choose Biology major to become a professional doctor, but I was interested in mathematics major and I decided to be an engineer. Although materials and courses of math were so difficult, I could have great GPAs in the high school and university, which made me a good engineer. Had I not chosen my desired major, I would definitely regret and I would not be successful as I am today.
Furthermore, choosing a favorite major of study, pupils will enjoy the better health during the living. It is crystal clear that right decisions make us happy and satisfied since we are able to pursue our desires and dreams; we all know we have the right to live in this beautiful world just once and we want to make the most use of it, so following dreams plays a vital role in our happiness. Studying favorite major is not an exception through which student are able to gain their purposes because high salary and money cannot bring a sense of satisfactory when we are not be able to chase dreams. For instance, having asked to choose Biology major, my sister could not be the person he wanted all the time, she wanted to be an artists but because of my parents opinion, she decided to be a doctor; unfortunately, she got depression during her education and dropped the university out. Had she pursued her favorite major like me, she would not have gotten depression.
In sum, not only will students be more successful individuals in the future, they will also enjoy a better mental health and be satisfied with their lives
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: WHETHER
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
...en a controversial debate among parents as to whether students should choose a major leading ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
...a sense of satisfactory when we are not be able to chase dreams. For instance, hav...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an artist' or simply 'artists'?
Suggestion: an artist; artists
...e wanted all the time, she wanted to be an artists but because of my parents opinion, she ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, as to, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2273.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73541666667 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66096313886 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49375 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.0013761959 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.357142857 100.406767564 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2857142857 20.6045352989 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29161905292 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104849749542 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736369079157 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182055842696 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0966923548631 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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