Scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries
It goes without saying that responsibility is one of the most important characteristics of human beings. There has been a controversial debate as to whether intellectuals and scientists should be responsible for destructive effects of their discoveries. From my perspective, requiring scientists to accept the consequences of their works is beneficial and both society and individuals benefit as a whole, and two reasons to support my view point are presented as follows.
To begin with, community can experience peace when scientists are required to be responsible for their discoveries. It is not a secret to any one that responsible people make a lot of progress during their lifetime since they are inclined to supervising every aspect of their decisions or works and then decide. When this trait is so vital, scientists as a large and effective community should be responsible for their actions in order to make the best decisions when they face dilemmas. It is crystal clear that in today’s world science has a high status because of its positive impact on humans’ lives since it facilitates the way we are living, but there has been a lot of negative consequences which have jeopardize humans’ lives; if scientists were more careful about the actual results of their discoveries, we would enjoy more peaceful living. Required to accepts unintended effects of actions and discoveries, scientists will not be lax. The production of nuclear bombs is a great example of harmful discoveries during the history. Had scientists be more responsible, we would not have been witness of huge slaughter in Japan. As you can see, having a sense of responsibility of required to be so, scientific community will be more helpful in spreading peace all over the globe.
Furthermore, there will be more useful people in society when scientists are responsible. Intellectual people are being considered as role models in their countries since they are able to make astonishing breakthrough in the scientific field; role models have great impacts on the fate of counties because young generation are obsessed with their works and life style, juveniles, who are going to figure out the destiny of their societies, can learn a lot from scientists since they are interested in following intellectuals’ rules, therefore it is more likely that a more responsible generation will be created when role models are responsible too. To put it in more vivid picture, my cousin was an addict, who had to spend prison time. having watched a speech from his favorite person in TED talk, he decided to quit addiction and escape from the clutches of being addicted and he succeed. As you can see, as these dominated people are role modern for people especially youths, they can lead society and its members to a better fate.
In sum, not only will people enjoy living in a more peaceful world, they will also are able to take the advantage of responsible individuals in community
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: anyone
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Message: Use past participle here: 'jeopardized'.
Suggestion: jeopardized
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'accept'.
Suggestion: accept
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, as to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 15.1003584229 238% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2480.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09240246407 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98128474421 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490759753593 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 117.638764413 48.9658058833 240% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.882352941 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6470588235 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379640465851 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12380049108 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982029145231 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216594037596 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123862795421 0.0645574589148 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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