Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that independence is one of the most important issues in young people's lives. There has been a controversial debate among people living in the present time as to whether people relied on their families too much in the past that they do now. From my perspective, today's young people are more independent than in the past, and two reasons to support my viewpoint are presented as follows.
To begin with, the economic prosperity has led to independency. It is not a secret to any one that people living in the past suffered a lot from poverty since there was not a lot of opportunities to have a good career and they used to have their own farms and cultivated different corps on them, juveniles and children of families have to work with their parents to meet their needs. But, by the advent of different factories people started migrating to cities and a majority of families sent their children to metropolitan areas in order to find a job. As a result, by the industrialization of towns and cities, there were more independent individuals working in manufactures meaning they did not have to live with their parents and rely on them to earn money and fulfill financially obligations. No longer do youth difficulty find a job in comparison with their ancestors since more job opportunities are available that can give them a sense of independency since they earn money by themselves and without parents' help.
Furthermore, by the time, we are witnessing a lot of concepts and principles have changed which is another reason for today's juvenile independence. It is crystal clear that science and technology have developed through with people's opinions and beliefs have altered as well. So it is more likely that children in a family experience independence than people did in the previous times. To put it in more vivid picture, according to my grandmother, when she was young, she was not allowed to leave home to continue her education in city since city was a little far from her parents' house; unfortunately she could not be educated and independent person during her life time because of her parent's point of views. Had my grandmother lived in the present time, she would be a knowledgeable person and she would experience a beautiful sense of being independent. As you can see, through the passage of the time people and parents have changed their mind about different important issues.
In sum, not only have people's opinions and beliefs changed, they are also experiencing economic prosperity thereby they can earn their own money without relying on others' help
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...among people living in the present time as to whether people relied on their families too muc...
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Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
... to independency. It is not a secret to any one that people living in the past suffered...
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Line 3, column 661, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...cated and independent person during her life time because of her parents point of views. ...
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Line 4, column 176, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...own money without relying on others help
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, well, as to, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2178.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85016673428 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488636363636 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.0092840367 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.2 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255214285069 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931716998724 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574513073757 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162612779867 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670603519853 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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