For success in school and work, the ability to adapt to a changing condition is more important than having excellent knowledge of a job or field to study.
It goes without saying that in this progressive world, where we live, being successful is really important. There has been a controversial debate among people seeking for success as to whether having significant knowledge for being successful is adequate. From my perspective, having an ability to adapt to different situations is more momentous, and two reasons to support my view are presented as follows.
To begin with, adapting to new and tough circumstances, people being students or employees will be more likely to be successful since they have no stress. It is not a secret to anyone that environmental factors extremely influence people's actions and performances specially those having difficulty concentrating on their responsibilities. Changing conditions means facing a lot of different kinds of obstacles and drawbacks, which are the major cause of being stressed out. Stress, obviously, has detrimental effect on people's minds and does not allow them to be their best at work or in schools because they will be overwhelmed with anxiety when they are not able to adjust to new situations, therefore they will fail doing their tasks as well as possible. To put it in more vivid picture, when I was a high school student my best friend Zeynab had great deal of knowledge and intellect in various subjects, unfortunately she could not control her feelings and stress during examination condition and she therefore was not able to get her desired scores. But I was more compatible, who can control her emotions, so I always got better scores than Zeynab. Had I not adapted myself to examination situation, I would definitely have gotten lower grades.
Furthermore, when people can adjust to the environment, they will be satisfied with the living. It is crystal clear that humans as intelligent creatures are inclined to create happier life in this planet and there is nothing unchangeable in the world. Thus we have to be compatible in order to continue this unevenly life; doing this, we will feel more confident since we know that we are capable enough of handling hardships. Such a confident will helps us to be powerful individuals who can survive under hard circumstances; it does not matter how smart and knowledgeable we are because as long as we are compatible, we will overcome every little problem on our ways in order to prove we can taste success and escape from the clutches of failure.
In sum, not only will students and workers focus on their duties better, they will also acquire confident that they need to continue their ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...debate among people seeking for success as to whether having significant knowledge for being ...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e is nothing unchangeable in the world. Thus we have to be compatible in order to co...
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Line 4, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that they need to continue their ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04245283019 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89508535693 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573113207547 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.936090172 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.533333333 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2666666667 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171383931289 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602044390358 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521884702223 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10110998512 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855589123686 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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