Which gift can contribute to a child’s development:
Camera
Soccer ball
Animal
What gift would you give to a child to help his/her development? Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
In recent times, taking care of animals is considered to be an important element among most societies. Most people tend to adopt one or two animals for many purposes such as having fun with them or helping them in certain events. Personally, I think animals play a major role in a kid’s development process.
To begin with, when teens have pets in their home, they can learn how to take care of other individuals. Obviously, the process of raising pets is completely similar to raising a human being. Therefore, children will learn some critical techniques by taking care of pets. For example, my wife Rana has a black cat her name is Nose. She has her since she was five years old. Rana used to take care of Nose by herself without any interference from her parent. Every day she prepares the bath for her; and she helps her eat her daily food. All these tasks allowed Rana to become responsible and kindness with everything. Therefore, when Rana got her first child, she did not need anyone to teach her how to take care of her first baby. She treated her first kid like she was treating her first cat Nose.
On top of that, giving children animals as a gift help them to be happy. Pets used to play with kids most of the time. So, children will find some partners to share their time with. For instance, my nine-year-old son Ali has a dog; he loves his dog more than his friends. Every time he has free time, he tends to go to the park that is next to his house and play some games with his dog such as a soccer ball or running games. The dog makes Ali happy whenever he has a bad day at school. Indeed, this dog assists Ali with his happy moments during his childhood.
In conclusion, I encourage parents to adopt animals in order to help their kids to enjoy playing with them and learn how to take care of pets.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37352941176 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26829166088 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555882352941 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7161414547 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.8095238095 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1904761905 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124097859787 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373806734012 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357836557309 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0599459989994 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296791365763 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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