Which one do you think is the most important factor for a student to succeed at college or university?
1. Tutors in university.
2. The encouragement from family and friends.
3. High-quality education from high school.
Without a shadow of doubt, academic Success plays an outstanding role in life. It is undeniable that, perfect grades in university and being perfect at academic projects can lead to a perfect career, from industry to academic jobs like independent researching. People are eager to pursue the ways to catch their goals in an efficient way to have a glorious future. Among them, some people are inclined to the idea that tutors play the leading role in succession, while some others are of the opinion that encouragement from family and friends boosts the self-confidence and leads to success and the other group of people convict that high-quality education from high school is the most essential. I subscribe to the idea that encouragement from familiars can lead to our improvements. In what follows, two reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
In approaching this issue, one should regard the fact that a human is a social creature and is sensitive to feedbacks and reactions to his/her opinions and successes or failures. Regardless of how persistent you are to social reactions, opinions and feedbacks have effects on you. In a research conducted by Tehran University, some familiar people said some positive aspects of the project which a friend failed at, and this made him successful at the next project. The assertion that the effects of social life are inevitable is true. So one must try to be in social relationships to more optimistic and more positive people to get more positive feedbacks from his/her failures and successions and learn from failures in order not to repeat the failure causes.
Furthermore, one should not underestimate the fact that familiar people like friends make the most of the relationships of life other than tutors and high school teachers. Alluding to this fact, if you are surrounded by friends that encourage you, it leads to your succession, and if negative signals and feedbacks are drowning you, most of the relationships are causes of your depression and disappointment. Social life is most important when you are with people that spend the most time of your day with them, and you get energy from them.
To recapitulate, the encouragement from family and friends for education is an essential factor in life which results from the fact that human is a social creature and familiar people make the most of the relationships, and we get most feedbacks from them. It is highly recommended that you surround yourself with optimistic people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...to pursue the ways to catch their goals in an efficient way to have a glorious future. Among them, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2085.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08536585366 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91837090801 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468292682927 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.9873924338 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.3125 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.625 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.625 5.45110844103 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3243759227 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926208754789 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849821587693 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213901711701 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794583257177 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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