which one do you think is the most important factor for a students to succeed at college or university?
1. tutors in university
2.the encouragement from family and friends.
3. High- quality education from high school.
Today, there is a vast variety of elements that have a profound impact on student's success in universities, such as money, family, school, and environment. Although, some people believe that school's tutors, high school's education are the most important factors for succeeding in schools. I concur with the idea that friends and family play the most significant roles in this purpose, and I have two main reasons, on which I will elaborate them in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, families are the fundamental source of money providing for students. To clarify this point, students have to earn a large amount of money to pay their fees and tuition, so they should rely on their family or themselves to provide them. If students want to rely on themselves, they have to spend at least twenty hours per day, which takes their time and concentration for lessons. Also, they would exhaust their energy by working and studying, so they would not have enough mental and physical energy to cope with their school's lessons. For instance, when I start my master at Concordia University five years ago, I spent twenty hours per week working on the dormitory. After a while, all of my exams were failed, and I was going to be fired from the school. I got it and requested money from my family in Iran. I think, if I had not relied on my family, I would not have finished my master's program at Concordia University. Thus, families play a considerable role in students’ prosperity by solving the financial problems of students.
Secondly, since studying in schools takes a large amount of time, students have to prepare themselves mentally, such as stress managing, boosting confidence and relaxation. To be more specific, many factors can affect our learning and succeeding which needs our family's help. For example, we need to have a calm environment on the exam's time or someone to recall our goals to stimulate us, and the reliable one who can help us is our family member. A study that was done in Iran shows that students who live with their family and have a calm environment have a better result in comparison to who live in dormitories. Thus, families by providing a calm place for studying and stimulating us to our purpose lead us to a successful life.
To sum up, families have a considerable influence on student's prosperity. Not only do families provide financial requirements for students, but they also help students to succeed by providing studying circumstances and provoking.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, i think, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91962174941 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77806044535 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522458628842 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1830092554 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.526315789 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2631578947 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246968961036 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775136111312 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562830413874 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151075403773 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504379181677 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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